Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to appreciate your intention towards local people that you have made mind to spend money on two distinct things.
Both have their own pros. on one side, funding sports team would be good for youth as they will get chance to compete with others and refrain on thier skills. It can motivates to them for outdoor activities.
on the contrary side, open-air concerts can help not only to attenders but local community as well. When viistors will come then it can become good source of revenue for them. Along with this, it will give then sort of break from their hectic life to get entertain with their friends and family members.
According to my view, supporting financially to young people for games would be greatful. As they can get chance to learn something new from coaches and they can improve thier physical strength. Nowadays, it is easy for everyone to visit any concert even they can enjoy it online as well. Therefore, I think investment in sports would be win-win situation.
I am looking forward for your response. I hope you will like my recommendation.
Yours faithfully,
Anju Pal.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task well. You successfully described the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, such as giving youth a chance to compete and improve physical strength. You also summarised the benefits of paying for the concerts, noting that it provides a source of revenue for visitors and a break from hectic lives. Finally, you clearly stated your recommendation that the company should spend the money on the sports team. The main ideas are relevant and supported, although some of the points are slightly brief and could be extended further. Overall, the requirements of the prompt are fully met.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is generally coherent and arranged in a logical sequence, following a traditional letter structure from the salutation to the sign-off. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different ideas, such as sports benefits and concert benefits. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or faulty, seen in phrases like 'on one side' instead of 'on the one hand', and 'on the contrary side'. Referencing is mostly clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother with more varied transitional phrases.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'distinct', 'revenue', and 'win-win situation'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'refrain on thier skills' (instead of refine), 'motivates to them', and 'attendees' spelled as 'attenders'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they demonstrate a limited control of lexical precision and spelling, placing this response firmly in the Band 6 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You have attempted a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over grammar. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'that you have made mind to spend' (instead of made up your mind), 'When viistors will come then it can become' (tense agreement issues), and spelling errors like 'thier'. Punctuation and capitalisation also need attention, such as beginning sentences with lowercase letters ('on the contrary side'). These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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