Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I saw a happy news recently in the news paper article about your company has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts.In my view, there are several reasons to sponsor a local children's sports team.Firstly, children get a great opportunity for playing sports such as football, cricket, badminton, tennis snd so on.Becaue several financially backward children are excellent in sports. Secondly, it is a chance to identify the extra talented children in various sports.Now adays most of the children are participating different sports for our nation and winning gold medals.Therefore sponsor a local children's sport team for two years is an excellent idea. However, paying for the open air concerts for two years is actually a good idea beacuse in the modern era most of them enjoying concerts for their leisure time to relax and calm our mind. people are stressed due to their work and study.Another benefits is that the raised fund will be useful for the charities like disabled people or elderly people.

Although the sponser for concert is really good for fundraising for charity, in my view children are the upcoming generation and they are very skilled so funding a children's sports team is really good and it is a long term benefits like skilled professional coaches and high well training sessions and so on.

I really appriciate to decided for the sponsor .Thank you for your patience and understanding.I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,

jayson.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You successfully covered all parts of the prompt by describing the benefits of the sports team, summarising the benefits of the concerts, and giving your clear recommendation on how the company should spend the money. Your position is maintained consistently throughout the letter. For instance, you detailed how sponsoring the sports team helps financially backward children and provides long-term training benefits, while also acknowledging the relaxation and charitable fundraising potential of the concerts before concluding that the sports team is the better choice. The ideas are relevant and generally well-developed, aligning well with the Band 6 or 7 descriptors, though some arguments like the concert charity link feel slightly rushed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally logical structure with an appropriate opening and closing, and paragraphs are used to separate different points, such as discussing the sports team first and then the concerts. However, cohesion at the sentence level is occasionally faulty or mechanical. For example, repetitive transition markers like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' are used, and there are some awkward conjunctions and missing spaces after punctuation marks, such as 'concerts.In my view' and 'so on.Becaue'. Paragraphing is present, but the middle block of text is quite dense and could have been broken up more effectively to enhance overall readability and progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrated an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'financially backward', 'leisure time', and 'upcoming generation'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that occur throughout the text, including 'news paper', 'snd so on', 'Becaue', 'Now adays', 'sponser', and 'appriciate'. While these minor lexical inaccuracies do not impede communication, they restrict your score because they demonstrate a lack of consistent precision in spelling and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempted a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating clauses with 'because', 'although', and relative pronouns. However, your writing contains frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues, such as missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and fragmented phrasing (e.g., 'Therefore sponsor a local children's sport team', 'most of them enjoying concerts', 'calm our mind', and 'I really appriciate to decided for the sponsor'). These errors can cause occasional difficulty for the reader and mean that error-free sentences are not frequent enough to reach a Band 7.

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