Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir,
I hope you are well. I am writting a letter to a large company in area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, sponsor a local children's sports team for few years and pay two open air conserts. If the company is sponsor the sports team then all childern of area are very happy and determental good response in sports. Which is the best affect on area and also essential part of children because when they playing sports therefore developed confidence.
Furthermore, the company is called a beneficial when the paynig for conserts. The people arranged consert every year however arrangements are not good for sports and all sports items are not currently available for best player or sporter. I think if the company is paying something or doing arrangements so all team are happy and show good performance.
I would like to suggest that the money should be divided into two: one part will be used to cater for the sports team while the second half can be used to fund the concert, as both projects will be beneficial for my people.
I would be very happy if my suggestion is considered.
Yours faithfully,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all the required bullet points from the prompt, demonstrating a clear attempt to address the task. The writer describes the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, touches upon the open-air concerts, and proposes a balanced solution in the final paragraph. However, the ideas lack full development and clarity in places, such as the vague explanation of the concerts and the slightly disjointed reasoning regarding the sports team's benefits. For example, phrases like 'all childern of area are very happy and determental good response' show ideas that are limited and under-developed. Despite these limitations in depth and clarity, the essential requirements of the task are met, aligning well with the Band 5 descriptors where the task is addressed, but ideas remain somewhat basic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter exhibits some organisational structure with a traditional salutation, sign-off, and clear paragraph breaks used for different parts of the prompt. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical links between sentences are frequently strained. For instance, the transition from discussing the sports team to the concerts in the second paragraph ('Furthermore, the company is called a beneficial when the paynig for conserts') is abrupt and confusing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is occasionally unclear, making it hard for the reader to follow the exact flow of argumentation. These features place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of these inaccuracies include 'writting' instead of writing, 'childern' instead of children, 'determental' instead of a word like 'demonstrate' or 'develop', and 'conserts' instead of concerts. While the writer attempts some less common terms and tries to express relevant ideas about community funding, the limited range and frequent lexical errors mean that communication is occasionally impeded, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 5 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences alongside frequent attempts at complex structures that are heavily flawed. There are constant errors in basic grammar, verb forms, and sentence construction throughout the text. For example, phrases like 'I am writting a letter to a large company in area has decided' contain missing relative pronouns and articles, and 'If the company is sponsor the sports team' misuses verb tenses. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band, making Band 4.0 the most accurate descriptor for grammatical accuracy and range.
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