Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 7.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my opinion regarding how your company should spend the money for the local community.
Sponsoring a children's sports team for two years could provide several benefits. Firstly, it would encourage children to participate in physical activities and develop healthier lifestyles. It could also teach them valuable skills such as teamwork, discipline and communication. Furthermore, supporting a local team would strengthen the company's relationship with families in the community and create a positive image of the organisation.
On the other hand, paying for two open-air concerts would also benefit local residents. Such events could provide affordable entertainment for people of different ages and bring the community together. In addition, the concerts could attract visitors to the area and support local businesses such as restaurants and shops.
In my opinion, I believe the company should sponsor the children's sports team. Although concerts would provide enjoyable entertainment, supporting young people for two years would have a longer-lasting impact on their health, personal development and involvement in the community.
Yours faithfully,
Huraira
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.5 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response fully addresses all parts of the task prompt. You successfully described the benefits of sponsoring the children's sports team, such as encouraging physical activity, teaching teamwork, and building a positive company image. You also clearly summarised the benefits of the open-air concerts, including affordable entertainment for different ages, bringing the community together, and supporting local businesses. Finally, you gave a clear and well-reasoned personal opinion on how the company should spend the money, choosing the sports team and explaining why it offers a longer-lasting impact. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the tone is appropriately polite and formal for a general correspondence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The letter is logically organized and easy to follow. Ideas are well sequenced, starting with an introductory paragraph stating the purpose, followed by body paragraphs dedicated to the sports team and the open-air concerts respectively, and concluding with a clear recommendation. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately, with each paragraph focusing on a distinct main idea. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In addition' are used effectively to guide the reader through the arguments without feeling mechanical or repetitive. Referencing throughout the letter is clear and precise.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
The vocabulary used is natural and appropriate for the task, demonstrating an adequate to wide range of functional language. You successfully incorporated less common vocabulary items and collocations such as 'physical activities', 'healthier lifestyles', 'valuable skills', 'affordable entertainment', and 'longer-lasting impact'. Word choice and spelling are accurate throughout the response. Although there is no excessive reliance on advanced idioms, the vocabulary is precise and fully sufficient to convey your opinions clearly and fluently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5
The response demonstrates a good variety of complex sentence structures, such as conditional or modal constructions ('could provide several benefits', 'would encourage children to participate', 'Although concerts would provide enjoyable entertainment...'). The majority of sentences are error-free, showing good control of grammar and punctuation. While there is a slight redundancy in the concluding paragraph ('In my opinion, I believe'), this minor stylistic repetition does not impede communication or detract significantly from the overall high standard of grammatical accuracy.
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