Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear Sir,
This letter is about general feedback of the people about spending money on sponsoring a team and open a concert.
There are many benefits of spending money on sponser a local sport team of children . In this way children 's interest would be developed. This provide them a great activity. Their health will be maintain. It is a best use of time.
On the other hand there are also many benefits of paying ammount on air concert. When we lounch somthing the adervtising is necessary. In concert this become easily. To held a concert we discuss mainy things about different problem related to our daily life
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But , I think your company spend money to help the poor and needy people of our society. Your company must analize the data of the poor people , record their source of income. Then you should help them through money and thing related to their daily life.
thank you so much.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the task prompt, attempting to describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, summarising the benefits of the concerts, and giving a final opinion on how the money should be spent. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and parts of the content stray from the prompt. For instance, the paragraph discussing the concerts introduces irrelevant ideas about launching products and advertising, which does not directly fit the context of a company sponsoring open-air concerts for the community. Furthermore, the final recommendation suggests helping poor and needy people instead of choosing between the two options specified in the task instructions (sports team or concerts). This indicates a partial misunderstanding or deviation from the task parameters, resulting in a Band 5.0 score for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The letter is structured with distinct paragraphs for each part of the prompt, showing a basic attempt at paragraphing. However, overall progression and logical flow are hindered by awkward transitions and mechanical or missing cohesive devices. Sentences within paragraphs, such as in the second paragraph ('This provide them a great activity. Their health will be maintain.'), feel disjointed. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors (such as spacing before periods and commas) disrupt the readability. While there is an overall structure representing a letter, the weak logical links between sentences and the deviation in the final paragraph place this at a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple everyday language. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices throughout the text, such as 'sponser' instead of sponsor, 'air concert' instead of open-air concert, 'lounch' instead of launch, and 'ammount' instead of amount. Additionally, collocations are weak, as seen in phrases like 'pay amount on air concert' and 'thing related to their daily life'. These errors and the limited lexical range restrict the ability to convey precise meanings, making Band 4.0 the most accurate descriptor for Lexical Resource in this response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty. There are numerous grammatical and mechanical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('This provide', 'Their health will be maintain', 'your company spend money'), incorrect word forms ('sponser', 'analize'), and punctuation spacing issues (e.g., 'But , I think'). These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in places, which aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.
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