Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to inform your company,In our area we decided to spend a certain amount of money to sponser a local children s sports team for two years , It has lots of benefits either promote sports and also positive impact for children activities . Public enjoyed and like for entertainment with childs physicle fitness .It is very good for all community.Through this we also increase our income and will be able to run our company. Company should spend the money for open- air conserts. Through this consert we sponserd a local children as per as general public . We collect general public feedback. This is because important for health and mentle satisfaction, with games we secure our health. we control many disease.When peaple stay healthy community also feel pleasent . So company should spend the mony open- air consert.All is good reputation for our company.
your faithful
saim.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt, including the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, the benefits of the concerts, and a final recommendation. However, the perspective and persona are somewhat confused throughout the text, as the writer shifts awkwardly between speaking as a member of the public and speaking as a representative of the company (e.g., 'our company', 'run our company'). The ideas are also quite repetitive and lack full development, especially regarding the specific advantages of each option. Despite these limitations, the bullet points from the prompt are touched upon, leading to a Band 5.0 score for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The letter lacks proper paragraphing, as nearly the entire text is lumped into one large, continuous block of writing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'Through this', 'This is because'), and referencing is occasionally unclear, making it hard to follow the progression of thought. While the general sequence of ideas follows the prompt's layout, the lack of paragraph structure and weak internal cohesion result in a score of 4.5, reflecting difficulties with organising ideas logically.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and spelling that impede smooth reading (e.g., 'sponser', 'conserts', 'mentle', 'peaple', 'physicle'). There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'entertainment', 'community', and 'reputation', but these are often offset by awkward collocations and morphological errors. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, best fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and frequent faulty attempts at complex ones. Punctuation and capitalisation are erratic, with missing full stops, incorrect commas, and a lowercase signature. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'In our area we decided...', 'Public enjoyed and like...'). These errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar with a Band 4.5 score.
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