Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writing regarding to my view point as your company started to get the feedback of gernal public about the fund will expend on the suports or the concerts.

Firstly, certain amount of money to children's support team can be benificial to enhance the motivation of sports children to explore their talent on social front.

In addition, children are strong foundation of every nation so spending on them can assist the players to opt it as a career and further can secure their future. Also, other children can get inspiration after watching them and they may try to follow their footsteps.

Secondly, giving funding to the open air concerts can greatly contribut to ameliorate the confidence and motivation among the artists. Morever, they can also explore their god gifted-potentials and can earn hefty amount of monetray gains with their performance.

Lastly, i would like to request you spend your money wisely through your mangers or other team. So, donot give it directly to the host company.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your reply.

your sincerely,

vipam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the two funding options and give some relevant benefits: team sponsorship could motivate young players, support a possible sports career and inspire other children, while concerts could encourage artists and help them earn money. However, the final recommendation is not clear. “Spend your money wisely through your managers or other team” does not say whether the company should choose the team or the concerts, and “do not give it directly to the host company” introduces an unexplained concern. The benefits are also asserted rather than supported with specific outcomes. To strengthen the response, state your preferred option directly and explain why it would benefit the local community or the company. The letter therefore only partially fulfils the purpose of requesting feedback.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with separate paragraphs introduced by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly,” so the reader can identify the two options and the closing point. Some ideas are linked, for example the claim that children may be inspired after watching the players. However, progression is limited: the final paragraph does not follow clearly from the comparison and leaves the recommendation unresolved. Several transitions feel mechanical, and the opening sentence is difficult to follow, which makes the purpose less clear. Organise the letter around the three requested points, use links that show comparison or cause and effect, and make the final paragraph a direct conclusion. A conventional sign-off would also help the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “motivation,” “explore their talent,” “inspiration,” and “monetary gains.” This gives you some means of discussing both sport and music. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret: “children’s support team” is unclear for a sports team, “god gifted-potentials” is unnatural, and “fund will expend on the suports” is hard to understand. There are also misspellings such as “gernal,” “benificial,” and “Morever.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “sponsor the children’s sports team,” “develop their abilities,” and “support local performers.” Proofreading spelling and choosing familiar collocations will make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including “Also, other children can get inspiration after watching them and they may try to follow their footsteps.” However, the range is limited, and complex constructions are often faulty. The opening, “I am writing regarding to my view point as your company started to get the feedback,” has problems with the preposition pattern and clause structure. In “I would like to request you spend your money,” the verb pattern is incomplete; use “request that you spend” or “ask you to spend.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in lowercase “i” and the sign-off. Practise accurate sentence patterns and check articles, prepositions, verb forms and sentence boundaries; these errors currently make parts of the letter hard to read.

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