Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

[redacted phone]st

Surrey,BC

L5H O9J

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to give my review regarding the event of your company which not only give sponsors to the players but also pay for two open-air concerts.

Sponsoring is feavourable to motivate new generation for playing sports, which is helpful to reduce the drugs from society as well as also helpful to find the right candidate for future. This is also polish the image of company at thr front of society.

Paying for concert also useful to collect more money by selling the tickets as well as it also encourage people to be a part of our industry.

According to my prospective company show invest money on winner's priceing and the advertisements so, maximum people would become a part of this event.

I hope this letter is helpful to take the decisions where investment is more useful.

Thank you

Yykk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the three requested points in a basic way: you mention motivating young people through sports, the concerts’ potential to attract people, and a preference for investing in prizes and advertising. However, the recommendation is not clear enough: “invest money on winner's priceing and the advertisements” does not explicitly choose either sponsoring the team or funding the concerts. The benefits are also brief and partly unclear, such as how sponsorship would “find the right candidate for future.” To strengthen the response, explain the practical benefits of each option and state directly which one the company should fund, with a reason. The letter’s purpose is identifiable, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a simple overall structure: an opening, a paragraph about sponsorship, one about concerts, and a recommendation and closing. This helps the reader identify the main topics. However, progression between ideas is limited, and the recommendation does not clearly follow from the comparison. Linking phrases such as “as well as” are repeated, while “According to my prospective” does not clearly introduce the intended opinion. The closing also shifts abruptly to “Thank you” and the sign-off “Yykk,” which weakens the letter’s organisation. Use clearer paragraphing and transitions such as “By contrast” and “For these reasons,” and make the final paragraph explicitly connect your choice to the benefits discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “sponsoring,” “open-air concerts,” “motivate,” and “advertisements,” so the reader can generally recognise the subject. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “give sponsors to the players,” “reduce the drugs from society,” and “winner's priceing” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “feavourable,” “thr,” and “prospective.” Build a more precise set of phrases for describing community benefits, such as supporting young athletes, promoting healthy activities, and attracting a wider audience. Check spelling and use words in natural combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, including the opening clause beginning “which not only…,” and use basic sentence forms to present separate points. However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “which not only give sponsors,” “This is also polish,” and “it also encourage people”; the verbs do not agree with their subjects or use the correct form. The phrase “company show invest money” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms before submitting.

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