Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Around the worls the peoples life expectancy increased than past. So some humans beliefs that aged persons arise issues for the government but some people beliefs that it have an advantage for the society.

If we take a look on aged people they have a lot of experience of life that can they deliver in various forms so it can suppress the disadvantages.

The senior citizens have lived more than the average persons of society so they have have more experience, so by sharing there experiences of life the younger people can live life more satisfactory and motivated. For example the pashtoon belt in northern Pakistan and Afghanistan they sit with there aged people in hujra, in which they ask from there elders about there life experiences and these elders can share there life experiences from which young generation learn a lot of things and get motivation for upcoming problems.

If the senior citizens of a regions is vanished so the culture of that region will be fade also because the senior generation know there own culture then younger generation, moreover if culture fades so the beauty of society will be vanished and the people will live there lives like a corporate slaves. Forexample is Islambad it consist of mainly young generation, furthermore here in islamabad the young generation did not know about there culture they lives there life in different sorts of drug abuse and in other bad things.

In conclusion, the aged population can build the future of a country and shape the society of a region which ouweigh the disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that the benefits of older people outweigh the disadvantages, especially through their life experience and role in preserving culture. The examples about elders sharing knowledge in Pashtoon communities and cultural change in Islamabad make the discussion relevant. However, the task asks you to weigh advantages against disadvantages, and the response gives almost no specific account of the problems an aging population may create for governments, such as higher pension or healthcare costs. The claim that older people can “suppress the disadvantages” is not explained, and the final conclusion repeats your position rather than weighing the two sides. Develop both sides and explain why the benefits are more significant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the examples generally follow the ideas they are intended to support. This gives the reader a basic overall structure. However, progression within and between paragraphs is not always clear: the second body paragraph moves from cultural knowledge to the broad claim that young people live as “corporate slaves,” without showing the connection. Linking expressions such as “moreover” and “furthermore” are sometimes used mechanically or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. References such as “they” and “there” can also make it difficult to identify who is being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences, develop one main point at a time, and make links between claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “life expectancy,” “senior citizens,” “culture,” and “motivation,” and you use examples tied to a specific community. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “aged persons arise issues,” “suppress the disadvantages,” and “corporate slaves.” Spelling errors, including “worls,” “Forexample,” and “ouweigh,” also reduce accuracy. Some words are repeated frequently, particularly “experience” and “life.” Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing public costs, social contributions and cultural continuity, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences using clauses and connectors, for example the sentence beginning “For example the pashtoon belt…” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas, but complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors. Examples include “the peoples life expectancy increased than past,” “they have have more experience,” and “the senior citizens of a regions is vanished.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries need attention. Many sentences also join several claims with commas or “so,” which weakens clarity. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled relative clauses and conjunctions; proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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