Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In several countries,this days people are living longer than past. Many individuals argue that elder population makes issues for governments, while others believe that it is benefit, if older citizens live in a society. So it has both different advantages and disadvantages that it will discuss in this essey.

On the one hand, one advantages is living elder generation people have historical information and creative ideas they pass, when thay were young in their life. Elder adults provide better informative history about past time to the younger generation, so younger generation people acquire knowldge from older people, and the ideas and information would be benfits for all of younger population.On other advantages is grandparents can be supportive and advicable for children. The good reason is grandparents support children by providing advice, and sometimes spend the time with kids. For example, In Japan elder people get more respect from younger generation. So it is obiously aging population creates many values for socities.

Despite all of these adavantages, Living in a society elder individuals have some drawbacks. Frist of all, long living people need medical care or healthcare in their life, one possible reason is hospital cost is more expensive in maintaning their life, so some of their family members do not take care themeself in their life. In addition, older people take pansion after retairment these is widespread issues in every countries, beacause the governtment should allocate pansion for them as well as pay them. It really creates problems for govenments to support older population. For instance, In Bnagladesh govenment allocate panson for 40 percentage older people after their retairment.

In conclusion, Although,people are now living longlife than the past days, it great for us to see them. However, elder adults can creates issues for govenments and also living long time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question by discussing older people’s contributions and the costs of healthcare and pensions. However, the task asks you to judge whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your position is not made clear: the introduction says there are advantages and disadvantages, while the conclusion begins “Although” but does not complete a clear comparison. The examples about Japan and Bangladesh are relevant, but the claims are brief and not explained enough to show how they support your argument. Develop fewer points in more detail, and state your overall judgement directly in the introduction and conclusion. For example, explain whether older people’s family and social contributions compensate for the financial pressures on governments, and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph presenting advantages, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “Despite all of these advantages,” and “In addition” helps readers identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: several ideas are joined into long sentences, and the relationship between the example about Japan and the claim about social value is not fully explained. The conclusion is incomplete, so it does not bring the discussion to a logical close. Use clearer topic sentences, separate distinct points, and connect each example explicitly to the argument. A complete final paragraph should summarise both sides and reaffirm your judgement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “historical information,” “medical care,” “healthcare,” “retirement,” and “allocate.” This gives you a basic range for discussing social and financial effects. However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow, as in “advicable,” “pansion,” “retairment,” and “govenment.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “living elder generation people” and “creates many values for socities.” Aim to learn accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, use “older generations can pass on their experience” rather than “living elder generation people have historical information,” and “place a financial burden on governments” to describe pension costs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “while,” “because,” and “although.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “one advantages is living elder generation people have” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “older adults can creates issues” uses an incorrect verb form. The final sentence, “However, elder adults can creates issues for govenments and also living long time,” is incomplete and does not express a clear grammatical relationship. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation, then proofread each sentence for completeness.

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