Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
These days population are increasing in every part of the world but there are some underrated countries where the population is not much. Some countries are work-friendly where finding a job is easier while in some contries are education-friendly. In some parts of the world the population elderly peoples are vast which is disadvantage for the government but the advantages overpower them. The disadvantages are that the population increases, economical loss, young peoples have to take care of more persons. while the adavantages are there are more job opportunities and more education opportunities. if the population are less the people who are working get more wages for the family. If there are more elder people in the country government gives many facilities to them which causes profit to the other members they can use the money that was going to be spend on the elder people they can save the money for there future plannings.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 155 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While you attempt to address both the advantages and disadvantages of an aging population, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or logical depth. The position is stated but not sustained throughout the essay. To improve, you must expand your points with detailed explanations and relevant real-world examples. The current structure is too brief to fully explore the complexities of the prompt, resulting in a superficial treatment of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, consisting of a single block of text. This makes it difficult to follow the progression of your argument. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'while' and 'if', they are used repetitively and sometimes inaccurately. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear transitions between sentences. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs—an introduction, body paragraphs for each side of the argument, and a conclusion—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. Phrases like 'work-friendly' and 'education-friendly' are not standard academic collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'population elderly peoples' instead of 'elderly population' or 'aging population'. You rely on simple, high-frequency words, which prevents you from demonstrating the range required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to demographics and economics, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'population are increasing' and 'population are less'. Additionally, sentence structure is often simplistic or run-on, lacking the variety of complex structures needed for higher scores. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the use of complex sentences with appropriate subordinating conjunctions to add depth to your writing.
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