Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people says that aging population creares problems for government so they think that if there was no elderly people in society so the society cannot face ,much difficulties.In some conditions they are right because elder peoples are not able to work properly and they cannot help people or government by earning money for their survival so they can effect the social econmy of societuy or country and the other issue from elderly peoples was that they are not healthy at that stage in this age they have many diseases which are spread from one people to another if one man in society have any disease than after some time it spread to some other peoples in society so this is an common problem of aging population.
But I didnot agree with that line aging population had more disadvantages than its advantages,because I think that elderly people in society has more benefits.I agree with those peoples who think that there are benefits if society has more elder people.In next paragraph i give reasons to my statement.
I think that eldery people was very important for young peoples because the elder people have much experience of every stage of life because they can face the time already in past and they now the rofit and loss of things that the young peole are doing at this time so they are important for young peoples as they give good and helpfull instructions to them.
From my point of view elderly people give benefits to society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the problems and benefits of an aging population. However, the development is limited. The argument regarding health issues is factually questionable and lacks logical support, while the section on the benefits of elderly people is repetitive and lacks specific examples. The position is clear, but the ideas are not fully extended or supported with sufficient depth to move beyond a basic level. The response is quite short, which limits the ability to provide a comprehensive argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and sometimes repetitive manner, such as the frequent use of 'so' and 'because'. The transition between the two main points is abrupt, and the concluding sentence is underdeveloped. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'creares' instead of 'creates', 'social econmy' instead of 'social economy', and 'elder peoples' instead of 'elderly people'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with precision, and the spelling errors are frequent enough to occasionally distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Some people says', 'elderly people was'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors (missing spaces after periods). Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as the run-on sentences in the first paragraph. These errors are frequent and sometimes impede the clarity of the message.
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