Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People have different views about elder persons. A number of people argue that the governments faces several problems due to ageing population, while others think that it is more useful for our society. In this essay, I discuss advantages and disadvantages of ageing people, and I also examine that why advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There are number of reasons why some people believe that older people create problems for the government. One possible reason is that It increase the population size that's why the government faces various problem. This is because when ageing people rises in the society, the need various kinds of daily necessities like foods, medicines, cloths, and houses. To fulfil this demand government has to allocate large amount of money. For example, In Bangladesh prespective there are many old people. The government of Bangladesh spend lions proportion of money about take care to them. However, despite the benefits mentioned above ageing population has several benefits as well. First of all, They provide their experience to develop society because younger people are less experienced compare to the older people that's why some time they gives wiseful advise to freshers they are not good at to do something. For instance, my grandfather was a great businessman and they achieve various success on their business career. When my father started this business, he face some issues for his lack of experience and lose huge amount of money. After that, they take some advises from my grandfather and according his advises he was able to recover this problem in a short time.
In conclusion, Although ageing populations have some disadvantages, I believe that their advantages outweigh the disadvantages because they are more expert than younger people for different purposes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the problems and benefits of an aging population and provides a clear position. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of the disadvantages focuses primarily on government spending, while the advantages section relies heavily on a single personal anecdote about a grandfather. To achieve a higher band, you should broaden your arguments to include societal or economic perspectives beyond personal experience. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points raised. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the depth of analysis needs improvement to fully explore the complexities of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While cohesive devices like 'However' and 'For instance' are used, they are occasionally applied mechanically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the use of 'they' when referring to the grandfather, which creates ambiguity. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the discussion of disadvantages and advantages could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear pronoun reference would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'wiseful advise' (wise advice) and 'lions proportion' (lion's share). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms like 'problems' and 'benefits' repeatedly. To improve, you should focus on using more sophisticated collocations and academic vocabulary. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling or word-choice errors occasionally distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of the writing. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('governments faces', 'ageing people rises'), incorrect verb forms ('he face some issues'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is usually understandable, these persistent errors demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that verb tenses are used consistently throughout your paragraphs.
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