Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is true, in many countries people live longer more then ever before becouse of their heakthier food and daily routine working amd excersie.Theyare not creating the problems for the Government rather then they teaches moral duties to the younger.
Many people in different Countries not exceeding 70th years of age becouse they are not care about their healh.In some country Country Government or society considerd elder people are useless.They not contribute in their country or a society progress.They are the burden on them becouse many of them have different types of diseases and may be some are too henius that's why they are against them.In Japan, people have longer age then anywhere in the word.
Meanwhile, some peopke belive elders are not reason to create the problems for the Government or any Societies.They play a vital role in develpment and progress in the country or a Society.People of a society can learn more experiance and advises from elderies for making a good society.They also teach the children moral duties those are ignored in modren era.
In Conclusion,elderies are not respnsible for the country problems and they also not the burden on any society rather than they protect their country or a society valuas.we must respesct them becouse they come at a age where they cannot do their works so we must take care of them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both the advantages and disadvantages of an aging population, touching on societal contributions, moral duties, and health burdens. However, the position is not fully clear or consistently supported due to underdeveloped arguments and frequent digressions. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, containing only 226 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is limited, pulling the score down to Band 5.0 according to official descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, and basic transitional markers such as 'Meanwhile' and 'In Conclusion' are used. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts in topic and repetitive ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are used mechanically. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of sentences and paragraphs is weak, which aligns with the Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a fully realized academic response. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'becouse', 'heakthier', 'excersie', 'healeh', 'considerd', 'henius', 'peokfke', 'experiance', 'elderies', 'respnsible', 'valuas', and 'respesct'. These errors and awkward word choices occasionally cause strain for the reader, fitting the profile of Band 4.5 to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include 'people live longer more then ever before', 'Theyare not creating the problems', 'Many people... not exceeding 70th years', and 'they come at a age where they cannot do their works'. Frequent errors in tense, preposition use, and sentence structure impede communication at times, placing the grammar at Band 4.5.
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