Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Most of the people around the world think that older peoples living more than 80 or 90 years is a blessing for the comnmunities ,whereas a number of people think otherwise and belive that aging over 50 or 60 is not good.

Here are some advantages of old people,old peoples are blessing because they teache us about practical life. moreever, they give us a better life and do that best descisions because of past experiences. they always pray for family peace and tell them to our parents about unity they beleived on unity and its a good thing at all.

as per statement some people metntality about aging population makes problem for living essentials ,they beleive if people live longer like 60 years or something this is not good .

if we talk about overall aged people advantages and disadvantages advantages are more than disadvantages becasue they gives us good trainning. elder peoples are very big blessing from allah .

they are always think and take stress for our futures and pray for us to have a successful life.

I beleive that aging peoples in a society is not a bad thing its a very good thing beacuse they always try to giving a bettter experience and examples they do in our lives .this is my point of view about elders

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt regarding an aging population and whether advantages outweigh disadvantages, but the treatment is very basic and repetitive. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the essay contains only 221 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. The writer states a clear position that advantages outweigh disadvantages, pointing to life experience and family unity, but ideas are under-developed and lack extension or concrete examples. Generalisations are simplistic, such as stating that old people 'teache us about practical life'. Because the response is under-length and ideas are insufficiently developed to reach a Band 6 level, a Band 4.0 is assigned in accordance with the descriptors for a minimal and under-developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing and a clear overall structure, consisting mostly of a run of loosely connected sentences and very short paragraphs that do not separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices are basic, inaccurate, or repetitive, with frequent use of simple connectors like 'moreever', 'as per statement', and 'beacuse'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by abrupt shifts between discussing advantages, acknowledging opposing views briefly, and returning to personal opinions. Pronoun referencing is also frequently unclear, as seen in phrases like 'tell them to our parents about unity they beleived on unity'. This level of organisation aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to everyday terms such as 'good thing', 'old people', 'problems', and 'life'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'comnmunities', 'belive', 'teache', 'moreever', 'descisions', 'metntality', 'becasue', 'trainning', and 'beacuse'. While communication is occasionally achieved, the limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracies cause strain for the reader. These features reflect the characteristics of Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and errors in spelling and word formation are prominent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures attempted. Most complex or compound structures are faulty, resulting in run-on sentences and major punctuation errors, such as missing capitalisation at the start of sentences and after full stops (e.g., 'as per statement some people...'). There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'older peoples living', 'old peoples are blessing', and 'they are always think'. These frequent errors frequently impede understanding and reflect the upper limits of a Band 4 performance for grammar.

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