Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Recent researches demonstrates that, across various countries the average life spain of people have increased significantly. Some people are of opinion that elderly population creates hurdles for the governments, however some believe that aging comunity carry more benefits. In my perspective aging population provides more advantages than disadvantages.

Some people beleive that elderly people creates more problems for the government, as they consume more than they provide. According to this perspective, a chunck of resources is spent on their health, care, shelter and food. In contrast, nothing practical is received in return. Thus, the process is one sided and not providing significant benefits.

On the other hand some people are of opinion that aging population provide experience and knowledge that is much more significant than materal worth. Consequantly, these people beleive that everything is not about give and take. The experience that the elderly community offer, help's the upcoming generation. Furthermore, recent researches also indicates that children that are brought up in the presence of grandparents, share a more happier childhood. In addition these researches also indicate that such children share strong values and rich knowledge of culture than others.

Looking at the both sides it can be seen that advantages of having elderly population outweigh the disadvantages significantly. Such olderly population provide a sense of home and comfort. They carry their years of experience and knowledge. This knowledge can be used to prevent failure and become a better version of oneself. Simulteniously, aging group of country are the pillers of culture and folk stores.

In conclusion, it can be stated that aging population provide more benefits to society, in comperision of problems it creates.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both the potential problems and benefits of an aging population and clearly states a position in the introduction ("In my perspective aging population provides more advantages than disadvantages"). The main ideas are generally relevant, such as the economic burden mentioned in paragraph two and the cultural and emotional benefits discussed in paragraphs three and four. However, some arguments lack full extension and suffer from generalisations. For instance, the discussion on emotional development and grandparents could be supported with more developed analytical reasoning rather than repetition. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing this response at a solid Band 6.0 according to the descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate distinct points of view. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. The writer relies heavily on basic transition phrases like "On the other hand" and "In conclusion," and there are minor structural lapses, such as the awkward opening phrase "Looking at the both sides." Referencing is mostly clear, but the logical progression within paragraphs can feel slightly repetitive due to restating similar points about experience and culture without advancing the argument smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the prompt, including terms like "hurdles," "consumption," "materal worth," and "pillers." However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as "researches" (research is uncountable), "life spain" (span), "comunity" (community), "beleive" (believe), "chunck" (chunk), "Consequantly" (Consequently), "materal" (material), "help's" (helps), "olderly" (elderly), "Simulteniously" (Simultaneously), "pillers" (pillars), and "comperision" (comparison). These lexical errors and awkward collocations show an adequate range for the task but indicate frequent spelling slips, which limits the score to a Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over clause structures (e.g., "Some people are of opinion that elderly population creates hurdles..."). However, there are frequent grammatical errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. Examples include "Recent researches demonstrates" (research demonstrates), "the average life spain... have increased" (has increased), "elderly population creates" (an elderly population creates), and "children that are brought up... share a more happier" (a happier). Additionally, punctuation errors occur, such as unnecessary apostrophes in "help's." These errors occasionally distract the reader, aligning the grammar with Band 5.5 descriptors.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.