Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
People live longer because of advence medical technology every disease have treatment and cure competely from disease. Hospital and pharmacies available widely due to rising indutry of medicne and educational back ground of mostly people.
In past mostly peolpe die lack of medical treatment and less techqueces available.
Aging peolpe become physcially weak that create the dependency of old to younger peolpe that alternate the builden of economy of government they rise funds for old people whose have not any yunger person who work for them help them financely other factor also mostly highly experience people are old and less chance of job for younger peolpe.In work place always perfer who experience skilled so less chance for lost if any thing get wrong.
The adventages of having old age people younger one will discuss their problem to elder who have experience to solve problem and get rid of it and spport emtionally and have moral value in house because in their era they do evwery possible thing for their childern and take care of them that were a big favour in their childhood
The disadvantage of older population is that low younger community who feed them and make them life by earning enough money for medical and other expensene to life it make difficultly so younge who have mot enough time to mange home jobs studies and other activities of life for themselves who need rest and have break from the hectic life routine of daliy lifewhich is improtantfor metal health
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt regarding the advantages and disadvantages of an aging population, and expresses a position, though the development is quite limited. The ideas presented, such as healthcare advancements, economic burdens, and emotional support from elders, are relevant but lack sufficient extension and support. For instance, the point about workplace experience is stated briefly without concrete examples or deep elaboration. Furthermore, the reasoning is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the pressure on younger generations. This performance corresponds to Band 5, as it addresses the task only partially with limited and under-developed ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting to separate general background, disadvantages, and advantages. However, the overall logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions and a lack of cohesive devices. For example, sentences such as 'In past mostly peolpe die lack of medical treatment' and the subsequent paragraph transitions lack proper linking words or logical flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical nature of the few cohesive links used causes the argument to feel disjointed. Paragraphing is also erratic, with mixed ideas appearing within the same paragraph block. This aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for overall arrangement.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe spelling and word-choice errors. Words like 'advence', 'competely', 'indutry', 'medicne', 'techqueces', 'physcially', 'builden', 'yunger', 'perfer', 'adventages', 'spport', 'emtionally', 'evwery', 'expensene', 'daliy', and 'improtant' demonstrate very limited control over spelling and word formation. While the student attempts to use less common terms like 'dependency' and 'financely', frequent errors and incorrect collocations cause significant strain for the reader and obscure meaning in places. This matches the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and heavily flawed attempts at complex structures. There is a near-complete absence of accurate punctuation, with run-on sentences and comma splices occurring throughout the text, such as in 'Hospital and pharmacies available widely due to rising indutry of medicne and educational back ground of mostly people.' Frequent basic errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and missing auxiliary verbs (e.g., 'every disease have treatment', 'older population is that low younger community who feed them') severely impede communication and distort meaning. This level of control falls squarely into Band 4.0.
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