Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Elder people have many advantages and disadvantages if the alive,

1 Advantages: A country have the most wisdom people and they have lots of experiences while the younger doesnt have.

Elder can have a very great impact in a socity just as when the elder or present in household so the younger generation have some fear in their hearts they are in control and when they gonna take any wrong step so they think about their elder befeore taking any step.

elder people are the most innocent they have good stemana to bear any hard time

most in the offices theyre taking great responsbilites which a younger have not much stemna as compared to elders.

and the most common thing about elders is they are always do good deeds and causing no harm to to the country.

2, Disadvantages: There are many disadvantages as well for elders one and the most common when they alive for long life so the younger cant took the responsiblities and doesnt take the chances because the country become over populated so the younger became jobless countries become poor and no great achivements coming from them, one other issue also coming up becase of long ages that is elder have the old culturals thinking and the younger have different so the overages people making problems for younger generation.

according to my experience in my country all the over aged people have old type of thinking while the younger have different they make obstacle in every step for young generation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides of the question by listing possible benefits, such as older people’s experience and influence in the household, and disadvantages, including pressure on jobs and differences in outlook between generations. However, the response does not clearly answer the central question of how far the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: there is no definite overall position or conclusion. Several points are asserted rather than explained—for example, the claim that older people cause overpopulation and leave younger people jobless needs a clearer link and support. To strengthen the response, state your judgement directly and develop a few relevant points with specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic division between advantages and disadvantages, so readers can identify the two sides being discussed. However, the numbered labels and repeated use of “elder” make the organisation feel like a list rather than a connected argument. Ideas within each section are not consistently ordered or linked: the discussion moves from wisdom to household authority, then to innocence and office responsibilities without explaining how these points relate. The final personal observation repeats the earlier point about generational differences rather than bringing the argument to a conclusion. Use clear paragraphs for the introduction, each side, and your judgement, and connect each main idea to its explanation with purposeful linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “elder” and “younger” used frequently to refer to older people and younger generations. Some phrases communicate relevant ideas, such as “wisdom,” “experiences,” and “responsibilities,” but several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow, including “good stemana,” “overages people,” and “old culturals thinking.” There are also awkward combinations such as “take the chances” and “causing no harm to the country.” Build a more precise range for this topic, using terms such as “older adults,” “workforce,” “pension costs,” and “intergenerational differences,” and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to express reasons and consequences, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammar errors sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. For example, “A country have” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the younger doesnt have” lacks an apostrophe and uses an unclear noun phrase. In “the younger cant took the responsiblities,” the modal verb is followed by the wrong verb form; “when they alive for long life” also lacks a correctly formed clause. Many sentences run together without reliable punctuation, making relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” and “as a result.”

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