Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, population of the nation is widely increased day by day. Many people are living more than previous time or lifespan is increasing. Due to this, older age creates such drawbacks for leadership. Other belives that aging people has such positive impacts in the community. I believe this situation or age is negative impacts as it could bring number of demerits interms of finance, family disputes and lonelyness respectively.

To begin with, having an aging people, It brings such critical situation in financial parts. To explain in it, when the person is becoming old there is slight changes in health. Due to which it makes such expenses on it. For instance, testing blood, xray . Similarly, family disputes shown in the family where the old person becomes borrowden. No one is comes to look or take care after aging . Due to which governments plan such programs and finance for them. after the family disputes and not care from the family members. It creates loniless and makes on depresion mood. Such situation comes and goes upward and difficult for government to manage and maintain good living standard & health status of senior citizens.

On the other hand, positive impacts of older citizen in the society. There is not much benefit but their ideas , techniques and experiences may help to youth and newly conduct government about policy & politics. To elaborate it further, if there is such ancient stone is found than there used and importance are being explained and gives information about it. Likewise, in context of policy makings their views and concepts may brings lightup in government and leaders. But in my views, there is more difficult for governement to manage and provides basic needs to aged person. They cannot singlely look them. It only possible in mass due to which proper supports can not get. And aging senior increase and difficult for family.

In conclusion, different perspects are shown as negative and positive way . At first one , there is different hurdles of aging. It brings difficulties to governement. also may have some good aspects for experience, realiablity of techniques. Due to such points are discussed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear overall view that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, and you identify relevant concerns such as healthcare costs, family support, loneliness, and older people’s experience. However, the response only partially develops the comparison required by the question. The disadvantages receive more attention, while the benefits are briefly mentioned as ideas and experience that may help young people and policymakers, without a specific explanation of their impact. Some points are also unclear—for example, the discussion of an “ancient stone” does not clearly show how elderly people benefit society. To strengthen the response, explain each main point with a direct link to the question and develop at least one benefit with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs that broadly contrast disadvantages and advantages, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its general structure. You also use signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: healthcare expenses, family disputes, government programmes, and loneliness are joined without clear explanation of how one leads to the next. Some linking phrases are repetitive or awkward, and references such as “it” and “such situation” do not always make the intended idea clear. Organise each paragraph around one central point, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “senior citizens,” “policy makings,” “health status,” and “experiences,” and you try to express abstract ideas about government responsibilities and social effects. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning hard to understand. Examples include “population of the nation is widely increased,” “an aging people,” and “borrowden.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “loniless,” “depresion,” and “governement” also reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check whether words combine naturally; precise, familiar vocabulary is more effective than unclear attempts at formal wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “Due to which” and conditional phrasing with “if.” However, control is weak across sentence forms, and errors are frequent enough to make several ideas difficult to follow. For example, “Many people are living more than previous time” has an incomplete comparison, while “No one is comes to look or take care” combines incompatible verb forms. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “having an aging people, It brings” and “their views and concepts may brings.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for agreement and complete structure.

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