Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many indviduals are saying that parent have should motivate their young one to participate in some group activities when they are free. while other parent are agree with this view and they their kids can do well with out joining any group for study.

According to my view, parent should encourage children to join various kind of group activities in them. So they can increase their perfomance in test or exam. it also helps children to develop social skills like communications ,time management, helping other and developed confidence speak with clearly and have clarity when they want to say no or yes to someone.for instance when I was little kid, I am not good with in studies to overcome this problem my professor advice my parent that children should do studies with class monitor Although at the beginning it was very hard for me to understand the concept in math but after going to home I ask my class monitor about this maths question and he guide me solve this problem by showing me the steps.with continous practise I am able to achieve my very grade in math.

On the other hand, many parents has this belief or thinking that my child will not study in the groups. All the childrens, when they meet with each other they start playing or talking instead of doing study.which is not good for them and it long run it will affect their grades.

Conclusion , we can see the both side views and doing groups studies clearly has more benefits than not doing group studies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a relevant opinion in the conclusion, favouring group activities, and give a personal example about improving in mathematics with help from a class monitor. This supports the benefits of learning with others. However, the discussion is uneven: the case for group activities includes several claimed benefits, while the opposing view is mainly that children may talk or play instead of studying. The task also asks about children occupying themselves on their own, but this alternative is treated mostly as studying alone rather than independent leisure or self-directed activities. Develop both perspectives more fully and explain your position consistently—for example, acknowledge when independent activities can build creativity or self-reliance before explaining why you favour organised groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting group activities, a paragraph presenting the concern about group study, and a conclusion. The personal example also gives the main supporting paragraph a clear focus. However, progression is limited because the second viewpoint is brief and does not fully connect to the question of independent free-time activities. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, such as “On the other hand” introducing a point about studying rather than a developed alternative, and “Conclusion” appearing without a complete transition. Several ideas run together in long sentences, especially the list of social skills and the personal anecdote. Use clearer sentence boundaries and develop each paragraph around one distinct viewpoint, with references that make the relationships between ideas explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social skills,” “time management,” “confidence,” and “grades,” and the example makes the meaning of the discussion generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the reader pause. For instance, “increase their performance in test or exam” is not a natural way to describe academic improvement, and “developed confidence speak with clearly” is difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “indviduals,” “perfomance,” and “continous” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for education and leisure, and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish organised group activities from independent pursuits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a personal example with a time sequence, but control is inconsistent. Frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “parent have should motivate,” “many parents has,” and “when I was little kid, I am not good with in studies.” The long sentence beginning “for instance when I was little kid” contains several clauses without reliable punctuation, so the sequence of events becomes hard to track. Practise forming accurate basic sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” or “when.” Check subject–verb agreement and keep past-tense narration consistent when describing your childhood experience.

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