Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Activites are part of life, people can keep themselves busy .With the help of it they keep fit and healthy . Few individuals think that garudiance force their kids to r connect with peer groups .Rest of them totally denied that ,if offsprings do own things that would be better for them .I would suggest that the group activites more beneficial than individual. Activites part of life , parents think that kids can busy their mind when they do work with f riends. They can learn more others because in groupall of them are not same ages .they can exchange their ideas,expand their knowledge.For example ,in 2013 in china teachers research that majority of kids comfortable in groups than own.As a ,result they likely to be more confident ,knowledgeable, expand ideas. Second side,parents are not allowed their kids to do work in group because of bad company .They prefer them to do work by own ,children are more independent on themselves .They can increase their knowledge with different ways such as reading books , search on internet. for instance,the study search that the intelligent children are more comfortable to do things own and creative mind. In conclusion, im going to taking the group acitivty side because adults have to learn things with their friends can exchange their ideas, boost their confidance at the end more social with all the people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the essay is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of development. While the ideas are relevant, they are often stated rather than fully extended or supported with detailed examples. The reference to a 'study in China' is vague and lacks sufficient detail to be persuasive. Because the response is under-length and the arguments are somewhat superficial, it does not fully meet the requirements for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and poor transitions. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as 'As a ,result' and 'Second side'. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument smoothly. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary cohesion to link sentences effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'garudiance' for guardians, 'offsprings' (which is non-standard in this context), and 'activites'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any precision. The student relies on basic, often misused terms, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning accurate collocations and standard academic terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('teachers research that'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures ('parents are not allowed their kids to do work'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often punctuated incorrectly. These errors are persistent and frequently cause difficulty for the reader. The control of basic grammar is weak, and there is no evidence of a wide range of structures.
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