Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A few individuals believe that parents should appreciate their children to take part in organized group activities in their leisure time, whereas others say that it is crucial for children to learn that how they can book themselves on their own. I think that children should take part in the group activities because they can learn and share ideas from their peers.

collaborating in group, enhance the development of child. When child is taking part in group activities, they can learn various things from their peers, share their ideas, viewpoints from the other students with which their information can be vast and can acquire different qualities from others. For instance, if an individual is facing problem in a subject, but if they are doing a group activity another child who has different tricks or different ways to memorize the things can help the to gain the information more easily. Moreover, I believe that learning in group not only enhance the development of child but also makes the learning fun.

Children become independent if they spend and learn to occupy the time by their own. In their free time,by doing any art and craft activity or working on his or her own interest or working on areas and improvement can help to succeed in his or her specific interest . As compared with group activities, sometimes the people or the students who are having difficulty in a particular subject may not able to share that thing and not able to work on the improvement, whereas when an individual is doing that by his or her own, then he or she can able to work on the areas of improvement. For example, learning and doing activities by own help children to figure out the area of improvement on which he or she can pay more attention.

In my opinion, children should do group studies because it will help to enhance their development as well as increase their knowledge.

To conclude, although occupying themselves on their own helps to become independent and work on their areas of improvement, but working in group activities will help to enhance the growth of child, will increase the knowledge as well as will able to build a good relationship and connections with their peers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the benefits of group activities are mentioned in the introduction, the first body paragraph, and the conclusion, which limits the depth of the discussion. The second body paragraph regarding independent play is relevant but could be more clearly contrasted with the first. While the prompt is addressed, the ideas lack the level of extension and sophisticated support required for a higher band. The position is consistent, but the overall argument would benefit from more varied examples and deeper analysis of the implications of each approach.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'For instance', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'As compared with group activities' and the phrasing in the conclusion. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'that thing' or 'that', which makes the flow feel slightly disjointed in places. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the lack of sophisticated linking devices and occasional awkward phrasing prevents a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'leisure time', 'peers', and 'independent', but the range is somewhat limited. Some word choices are imprecise or non-idiomatic, such as 'book themselves' (likely meaning 'occupy themselves') and 'information can be vast'. There is also some repetition of basic phrases like 'areas of improvement' and 'enhance the development'. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise collocations and a wider variety of synonyms to avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'collaborating in group, enhance the development of child' (missing articles and subject-verb agreement) and 'can able to work' (incorrect modal usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence boundaries and missing articles throughout the text. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these errors—particularly with articles and verb forms—means the student does not yet demonstrate the consistent control required for a higher band.

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