Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people believe parents should encourage their children to participate in group activities, while others believe children should learn on their own. I believe that they should learn by doing group activities

People think it is best if their children participate in structured group activities, as they learn how to behave with others while working in groups, which helps them become good children who know how to respect others and their points of view. They also learn the power of being kind, helping others and stay calm in any situation this will help them in future For example if a child is aggressive in his childhood and did not take part in group activities he will remain the same for rest of life as he have not any qualities like being kind, behaving while working in group and many more on the other hand if a child take part in group activities he can face any problem without any fear while working in a group. Children can have fun while doing activities. Some activities teach you how to speak with others well.

However, people think it is best if children learn on their own. If they enjoy their own company, they can face any problem without fear because they become mentally strong; they can also work without asking for any help from others. They know how to take care of their parents when they get old. If they work on their own, they can learn quickly rather than relying on others.

I believe group activities are best for a child's development, as they help a child become a good person in the future and know how to treat others with happiness and kindness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding children learning to be 'kind' is mentioned multiple times without significant expansion. The points made about children learning to be 'mentally strong' by working alone are relevant but lack specific examples or deeper analysis to fully support the position. To improve, aim to provide more nuanced explanations and concrete examples that illustrate how these activities specifically impact a child's development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and there is a reliance on simple linking words. For example, the transition 'on the other hand' is used, but the overall flow between the benefits of group activities and the benefits of solitary play could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'they', 'this') is always clear will help elevate the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good children', 'fun', and 'problem'. While these words communicate your meaning, they do not demonstrate a sophisticated command of language. There are also some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'behaving while working in group' instead of 'collaborating effectively'. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to child development and social skills.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'if a child take part') and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences where ideas are not properly separated. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence boundary control and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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