Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
in this contemporary era, every one trying to utilize there free time to learn something and some parents believe that there children should take part in group activities during free time but other say that they should use time to prepare their self rather group activities. i will discuss the both view and my opinion in next paragraphs.
to begin with, group activities good foe new growing children because thy can learn that how to do work in team which will give help in future. Moreover, children can take part many other activities in which they can play alone such as, they can learn how to behave with other children which help to became extroverts.
On the other hand, toddler can became independent if they utilize their time to improve there self because if they stuck then can try to find the way how to solve this rather than depend on others. furthermore, they can use their free time to read the books to improve their learning skill and they can do work on their imagination like use their thinking during art activities.
In my opinion, both structure play the crucial part in children growing life but if they take part in group activities that can make benefits in there life because toddler age is just for relax mind and it is impossible if they take part in group activities where they learn new with peace mind.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For example, the argument for group activities is brief, and the explanation of why children should occupy themselves is not fully explored. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts the depth of the discussion. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples and ensure that your arguments are fully developed to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a more thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is sometimes hindered by unclear phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand', the transitions between ideas are occasionally mechanical or confusing. For instance, the link between playing alone and becoming an extrovert is not clearly explained. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes imprecise, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'good', 'do work', and 'things'. There are also frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'foe' instead of 'for', 'thy' instead of 'they', and 'there' instead of 'their'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use it more accurately. Focus on learning collocations and synonyms for common words to express your ideas with more precision and variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('every one trying', 'toddler can became'), incorrect pronoun usage ('there children'), and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, such as 'if they stuck then can try to find the way'. These frequent errors make the text difficult to read at times. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and pronouns before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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