Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few individuals opine that gaurdians of childeren make sure that their child compulsory takes part in local group activity in their lesuire time. Meanwhile, other people stats that childeren should not be forced and they should explore their area of interest to focus. My perspective on this topic will be shared with opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

First of all, a outsider should not dictate the parents on their choices for their childeren extra curriculum and only family relatives can gave their suggesstions. Moving on, nowadays due to rapid changes in lifestyle of childeren, young kids develop skills on their on very easily with time. Hence, they harness their skills in the school itself. For an example, young students takes part in extra curriculum activity in schools such as, dancing, art- drama and sports activity like cricket and football. There is no point of putting pressure on the young child to do indulge them in any group activity to disturb their psyche.

To commence with, the yound kids has stage fear, lack of expression in open society or with their friends and family. Largely, due to peer pressure and strict family rules in their houses, where there is communication and generation gaps, For an instance, recently there is increment of autism diagnosis in western world that affected the mental and emotional health of child. In this scenario, group activities play a vital role in autism support by building social interaction, communication, and emotional regulation in structured settings

To conclude, every childeren's emotional and intelligent quotient is varied with another. They should carefully assessed with their specific needs. Independent kids should make their choice at freewill and give priority to critical kid.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the benefits of group activities, the connection to the prompt is sometimes obscured by unclear reasoning. For instance, the paragraph regarding autism is a specific example but lacks a clear link to the broader debate about whether parents should force children into activities or allow them to be independent. Your own opinion is present but could be more clearly articulated and integrated throughout the essay. To improve, ensure each paragraph directly supports your central argument and provides a clear, logical progression of ideas rather than shifting focus abruptly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'To conclude', but others are used incorrectly or in a way that creates confusion, such as 'Moving on' or 'To commence with' which does not logically follow the previous point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds naturally upon the previous one will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'gaurdians', 'childeren', 'lesuire', and 'suggesstions'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'emotional and intelligent quotient', the frequent spelling mistakes and incorrect collocations (e.g., 'do indulge them') hinder the overall quality. To reach a higher band, you should focus on mastering the spelling of common words and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms that accurately convey your meaning without relying on repetitive or misused phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is low. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'young students takes part', 'the yound kids has') and incorrect article usage are persistent throughout the text. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced commas and run-on sentences that make the text harder to read. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a highly effective way to improve your score.

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