Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

According to me, parents play an important role in every child’s life.Although, doing everything by own is important yet taking participate in group activities is also important.There are some reasons behind this statement. In below paragraphs I’m going to discuss about both statements and will give my own opinion.

Firstly, I’m going to discuss why doing everything by own is important. The first and foremost reason behind that is gain more confidence. In my perspective, if children will do everything by their own such as play, do other stuff they will gain more confidence to describe their feelings in front of others. For example, in school days, i was really shy while doing any group presentation, really hard to do presentation in front of class thats why i always preferred to depend on my others friends for my presentation.However, nowadays, whenever there is any presentation in class although group presentation, i always love to do by myself which showed me that gaining confidence is the first key by doing everything on their own.

On the other hand, I’m going to explain the reasons why it is important to do work in organized groups. Firstly, came to know about others ideas. According to me, if parents gave priority to teach their kids about group work then they come to know more about others ideas and view points. For instance, i vividly remember that last month, i did an assignment which was on the basis of history topic but I’m the one person who don’t have interest in history thats why i became able to do this assignment with the help of other group members. Apart from that, this is also good because in groups we can make friends, come to know about others.

To conclude it, i just want to say that in my opinion parents should teach their kids about group organized work because of above mentioned reasons

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding why children should work alone is slightly repetitive, focusing heavily on 'confidence' without exploring other potential benefits like independence or creativity. Similarly, the points regarding group activities are somewhat superficial. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced reasons and ensure that your personal opinion is integrated more naturally throughout the essay rather than just stated at the end.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', and 'For instance'. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In below paragraphs I’m going to discuss'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences lack smooth flow. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences are connected more fluidly to guide the reader through your argument without the need for signposting phrases like 'I’m going to discuss'.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'do everything by own' and 'do work'. There are also some errors in collocation and word choice, such as 'taking participate' instead of 'participating' and 'do presentation' instead of 'give a presentation'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary and collocations appropriate for an academic or formal context. Avoid informal phrasing and try to incorporate less common lexical items to demonstrate a broader range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include missing articles ('in school days', 'in front of class'), incorrect preposition usage, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'I’m the one person who don’t have interest'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, specifically articles and verb forms.

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