Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays children's are very much concerned about their personal activities they are not comfortable in group activities where some childrens are very much active and want to join any group activity which can help them in their social interactions.

I believe the nature of young individual is totally dependent on their surroundings where they observe action and act accordingly.

The first thing i would like to talk about children's way of interacting with other individuals on that behavioural basis you can suggest one to join group activities or he/she can join buy themselves because you can not force someone to do such activities they are not comfortable in doing that which can lead them to so many mental health issues where a young candidate can suffer and there are chances that he will never choose such activities again.

instead of that try to guide him with your actions where you can teach him the importance of group activities for example talk about any group activity you did with your friends or colleagues in which you had so much fun and you can involve your child and family in that discussion so the child can also try.

I think young generation is very exposed to the digital media that they are trying to isolate themselves and believing that is the best life they can possibly live but the truth is not that and you can surely not implement that on a child forcefully to adapt that but yiu can guide the young child with your actions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views, but the development is limited. While you provide a personal opinion, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the suggestion to 'guide him with your actions' is mentioned twice, but the benefits of independent play versus group activities are not fully explored or contrasted. To improve, ensure each viewpoint is supported by distinct, well-developed reasons rather than general advice. The essay lacks a clear structure, such as an introduction and a conclusion, which makes the position feel less formal and less clearly articulated throughout the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks paragraphing, which is essential for organizing ideas logically. The text is presented as a single block, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of arguments. Cohesive devices are either missing or used in a repetitive, mechanical way, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect long, run-on sentences. There is a lack of clear transition between the discussion of the two viewpoints and your own opinion. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each main idea and employ a wider variety of linking words like 'furthermore', 'conversely', or 'consequently' to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There is significant repetition of words like 'activities', 'children', and 'group'. Some word choices are imprecise, such as 'young candidate' when referring to a child, and 'implement that on a child' which is not a natural collocation. The vocabulary is somewhat informal and lacks the academic tone expected in an IELTS task. To improve, try to use synonyms and more sophisticated collocations to express your ideas more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'childrens are', 'nature of young individual is'), punctuation (missing full stops, leading to run-on sentences), and article usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple or repetitive, with few attempts at complex sentences. The lack of proper sentence boundaries makes the text feel fragmented. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using commas and periods correctly to separate distinct thoughts.

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