Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Different activities are part of human lives. For children who have differenet talents in various activities spend their time in that which helps them to intrect in society. This why they can build groups and enjoy with them. Organzing group activities and spend time with one activities both have their postivies,their effects on children lives which we will discuss in following paragraphs.

Firstofall, some parents thought that encourage their children in organizing groups activities by their own. This way they learn how to manage the event. Firstly, they have to think about their budget, resources, time and venue for event. This develops their critical thinking. Some time these activities create group with unknow. These unknown group may gives them good friends. Furthermore, some time these friendships gives them better guidence and mentorship in children life. On my opinion these group activities reduce children social anxiety and develops their emotional and mental capacity to tolerate different events in their life. Example, oragazinig groups tour with unknows from differnt part of your local area can develops their social bond.

Secondly, some parents thought that children should spend their free time in good way. Like preparation for government job exams, singing, dancing etc. These activities provide them better carrier growth in future. So some parents decides what is best for their children in advance and plans their children future with that. These activities develops their skills and gives better opportunity in future life. These way children can learn about importance of time in their life. Example, Inveolve children in cricket from ealry childhood, gives them better opportunity in future.

In conclusion, we can say that both views have their own goods. Both can helps children to grow up with talents and responsibilties in their life. Both ways gives them better ideas on what is best for their future and also helps to take better decision for their future life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—organised group activities and individual self-occupation—and provides a personal opinion, albeit somewhat vaguely formulated. The ideas are relevant, such as mentioning social anxiety and skill development for future careers. However, the development of these ideas is limited and at times repetitive or superficial. For instance, the argument regarding unknown groups giving guidance is underdeveloped. The position is discernible in the conclusion, but the lack of precise elaboration keeps the task achievement at a moderate level, aligning well with the descriptors for Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organized into paragraphs with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, grammatical errors, and repetitive phrasing (such as 'both ways gives them better ideas on what is best for their future'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically ('Firstofall', 'Secondly', 'In conclusion'), and referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in vague pronoun usage ('This why they can build groups'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs often breaks down, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 5.0 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling throughout the text (e.g., 'differenet' instead of 'different', 'intrect' instead of 'interact', 'Organzing' instead of 'Organizing', 'carrier' instead of 'career', 'Inveolve' instead of 'Involve'). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary ('social anxiety', 'mentorship', 'critical thinking'), the frequent lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and constrain the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('parents thought that encourage', 'these friendships gives'), tense consistency, and sentence structures that are incomplete or tangled (e.g., 'Organzing group activities and spend time with one activities both have their postivies,their effects on children lives which we will discuss in following paragraphs'). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at Band 5.0.

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