Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Undeniably, youngsters are future of our country. so, everyone should take care on these generation. So, few people claim that that childs need to take part in organised group activities in lesiure time and others think that child can learn own activities. According to me, if childs take part in different activities then they can enhance their knowledge and build their confidence. there will be discuss both views in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, to first school of thought young ones need to join group activities. I think it can be good way to ehance their knowledge because children can learn many things from another group of children and many another skills can improve in childrens life such as build confidence, enhance learning skill, improve communication skill and so on. For example, A PORTAGE COLLEGE kept a competition in 2016, everyone saw a one child win every competition related with communication, sports and interview question when college staff searched about child then they examine that child take part in every group activity.

On the other hand, some individual tell that children can learn themselve because if any child do things for themselve then they can grow in future and become strong person. In future, these type of children can manage any thing and face any difficulties alone. For instance, A punjabi university conducted a survey in all government colleges in 2020, some childs build good future and ehance their carrer because they fight alone in problems and leran themselves now they are successful business man.

In the end, i want to tell you that childs can learn themselve and can become strong for face any difficulties but if they take part in group activities then they can ehance their more knowlege and they can meet many people and build their confidence in every field.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear preference for organised group activities, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The discussion is relevant: you explain that group activities can build confidence and communication skills, while independent activity may help children become self-reliant. However, the two sides are not developed equally or in much detail. The examples about Portage College and a Punjabi university are difficult to verify and their connection to the claims is not fully explained. Develop the reasoning with a specific, plausible example and explain how it supports each view. The conclusion restates your preference, but could make the comparison between the benefits more explicit. The response meets the stated length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To commence with” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in viewpoint, and the main ideas are generally easy to follow. However, some linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “So” and “For example.” The opening sentence about youngsters being the country’s future does not lead clearly into the debate, and references such as “these type of children” are not always precise. Improve progression by linking each explanation directly to the task and using clearer references, so readers can see how each example supports the point being made.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “organised group activities,” “communication skill,” “confidence,” and “face any difficulties.” These choices make your main meaning understandable, but the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural. Examples include “take care on these generation,” “enhance their more knowledge,” and “fight alone in problems.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “lesiure,” “ehance,” “carrer,” and “knowlege” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate range of collocations for discussing development and independence, and check spelling and forms carefully. More natural phrasing would help you express the same ideas with greater clarity and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if any child do things for themselve then they can grow in future.” This shows an effort to express cause and effect, and the overall message can usually be understood. However, some errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries remain. For example, “childs need” and “a one child win” have agreement or number problems, while “there will be discuss” is not a correctly formed passive construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “so” after a full stop and “i” in the conclusion. Practise accurate sentence patterns and proofread for these recurring grammar and punctuation issues.

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