Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is undeniable that childern's to participate in organized group activities whther in local, state level or national level because it gives them a structure platform to show talent, build coonfidence and its a ladder to be successful in the life.

I strongly agree with the fact and in my view, parents must encourange childern's to take part in organised group activities with in their free time. Childern's must identify their strong interest areas and give them a chance to show their work, talent to the world and these small steps can create structured process for them to develop these as skills or their own value streams. Childern's alos to lean how to convert these skills to build bsuiness or domain specific by which they can create wealth or get them recognised by the world. For example: Sachin tendulkar was only 6 years when he started playing cricket and their parents supported him to develop the skill to the next level and world got the little master the god of the cricket with highest runs and many records on his name.

Further to the same idea, I disagree with the statement of keeping themskeves, childern's must exppose themselves in theor early age with peopple, friends, other kids and local ecosystem which give them experiences and lifelong learnings. When childern's keep themselves in small circle or within themselves, often observed those kids lack confidence, gets eaaily drained in crowd, unable to express in public forums, lacking in practicle learnings and these are not the best for the their future. For example: Most tier two cities doesn;t have lots of opportunities for kids to participate in events, public confrences and local kids often avoids participating which become a habit and results in low confidence and this simply create a hurdle to expose them in public speaking or open forums.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for organised group activities, and your examples about Sachin Tendulkar and children in smaller cities are relevant to the topic. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the case for children learning to occupy themselves independently is not really explained: you mainly reject it and describe possible disadvantages of staying within a small circle. Your position is present, but the discussion is therefore only partial, and several claims—such as that group activities help children build wealth—need clearer explanation and support. To strengthen the response, explain what independent activities can teach, such as creativity or self-reliance, before comparing their benefits with those of group participation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: the opening introduces the topic, the next paragraph supports group activities, and the final paragraph considers the alternative. Examples also help readers follow the main points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to track because several claims are joined together without clear links, as in the discussion of identifying interests, developing skills, and creating wealth. Phrases such as “Further to the same idea” do not clearly signal the shift to the opposing view, and repeated references to children make the writing feel repetitive. Use a clearer sequence—one paragraph for each view, followed by a direct comparison—and make links between claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “organised group activities,” “confidence,” “lifelong learnings,” and “public speaking.” These choices show an effort to express ideas beyond very basic language. However, the range is limited by frequent spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations, which sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “structured platform,” “build business or domain specific,” and “practicle learnings”; “children” is also repeatedly misspelled as “childern’s.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “develop their abilities,” “gain practical experience,” and “participate in community events” would make your points clearer and more appropriate for an academic discussion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses to explain reasons and examples, but control is inconsistent. Many sentences contain errors that make the reader work to understand the relationships between ideas. For instance, “It is undeniable that childern's to participate” lacks a complete grammatical structure, while “When childern's keep themselves in small circle … those kids lack confidence” has problems with sentence construction, articles, and agreement. There are also frequent errors with possessives and verb forms, as in “their parents supported him” after referring to Sachin’s parents. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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