Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to remind you that i recently met with you in the plan which was heading from India to Canada last friday.It was really great experience to meet with you that you shared some of the your life experiences with me and made my journey happy and enjoyable.

Admittedly, it was my first journey to a foreign country and i don't have any job experience yet in canada.Moreover, i am a student here and i can do only part-time work for 24 hours a week.As i came to know from you that you owns many restaurants in canada.But i forget to get some the details about the jobs vacancies from you at that time.I have great need of job to fullfil my basic necessities.Apart from this i also git a study loan from India which i have to pay during my study.

In addition,i also completed my cooking course from India's best international institute 'Lovely Professional University'.But I didn't have any foreign cooking experience.I will try my best as a line cook to gain more experience and proof best for your restaurant.Thank you for your time and consideration.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Your's faithfully,

Mansi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the flight from India to Canada and when you met, state that you are interested in working as a line cook, and explain your cooking-course background. The letter is relevant and its purpose is clear. However, some details are less fully developed: the meeting is not anchored with a specific date beyond “last Friday,” and your suitability would be more convincing if you connected particular skills from your course to restaurant work. The financial need and study loan explain why you want a job, but they do not show as directly why you would be a strong employee. A more specific request about a vacancy or next steps would also make the purpose of contacting him clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens by recalling the meeting, moves to your circumstances and job interest, and then gives a reason you may be suitable before closing politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages. Some links are mechanical or do not express the relationship between ideas clearly. For example, “Moreover” introduces your student status, while “Apart from this” adds the loan detail; these transitions make the paragraph feel like a list. The shift from needing work to describing your cooking course could be smoother, and “In addition” is followed by several ideas in one long sentence. Use clearer links to show how your training and availability support your application.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including “part-time work,” “cooking course,” and “line cook.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “foreign cooking experience,” although this is not a natural way to describe experience working abroad. Several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors reduce precision: “plan” for “plane,” “fullfil my basic necessities,” “git a study loan,” and “proof best” are unclear or unsuitable in this context. Some phrases, such as “made my journey happy,” are understandable but not idiomatic. Aim for accurate, natural expressions for a formal job enquiry, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning “that” and “which,” and the reader can generally follow your meaning. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “you owns” should be “you own,” and “i recently met with you in the plan” has problems with capitalization and the preposition/article pattern. In “I forget to get some the details,” the past-tense form and determiner structure are inaccurate. Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the opening sentence and the long sentence beginning “As i came to know.” Review subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms, articles, and sentence boundaries to make your message more controlled.

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