Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jashan,

I am writing this letter to give you a gentle reminder about the job opportunity that you offered me.

First of all, it was a beautiful experinece for me to fly with such a great business man. It has been around four month when we fly together from India to Canada. Luckily, we had same seats in the plane and gradually we started talking about each other.

As i came here in canada for better employment opportunities, so you gave me few options how can i manage my expenses with side jobs untill i get my permanent position related to my studies. Therefore, you gave me information about some of your restaurants. I am looking for a kitchen helper job, as this can help me to enhance my cooking skills.

I have around 4 years of experience working as a kitchen helper, my last job only included diswashing but i want to learn more about cooking and also want to improve my communication skills. I have already some knowledge about kitchen work and as your restaurant serves drive thru. I can also help with online orders.

I hope you will accept my request to work at your restaurant.

Thank you

Your faithfully,

Jaspal Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you remind Jashan that you met on a flight from India to Canada, identify a kitchen-helper role, and give relevant reasons for your suitability, including four years of experience and willingness to help with online orders. The purpose is clear and the tone is generally appropriate. However, some details are less fully developed: the reference to “some of your restaurants” does not clearly ask about a specific vacancy or next steps, and the suitability explanation could connect your experience more directly to the duties of the job. The opening also says he “offered” the opportunity, while the prompt says he suggested you contact him about a possible job. A more precise request would complete the letter more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally coherent sequence: you explain when you met, describe the conversation, state the job you want, and then give reasons for your suitability. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “First of all” and “Therefore” make the progression easy to follow. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. For example, “As i came here in canada … so you gave me” combines two linking structures, while the sentence beginning “I have already some knowledge” shifts abruptly to online orders. Grouping your experience and relevant skills together, then ending with a direct request for an interview or reply, would make the progression smoother and the relationships between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the situation and job-related ideas, including “employment opportunities,” “kitchen helper,” “cooking skills,” and “online orders.” These choices are relevant, though the range is somewhat repetitive and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural. For instance, “beautiful experinece” is not a natural description of a flight, and “same seats” would be better expressed as “seats next to each other.” Spelling errors such as “experinece,” “untill,” and “diswashing” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully; this would make the letter sound more professional while preserving its clear meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter includes both simple sentences and attempts at more complex structures, such as “As i came here in canada … so you gave me few options,” so there is some variety. Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. In “It has been around four month when we fly together,” the time expression and verb tense need restructuring, for example, “It has been about four months since we flew together.” Other examples include “I have already some knowledge,” which needs a different word order, and “I have around 4 years of experience working as a kitchen helper, my last job…,” which joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Review tense, articles, sentence boundaries, and capitalization to improve control.

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