Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I would like to inform to you that my name is Amit Mishra from India. We met each other last year during your India visit, you sat just beside of my seat in flight and we discussed about business,economy and artificial inteligence. I hope you should remember me.

I would like to join your company as a operation manager, I have a MBA degree with finance graduate , I have almost 8 years of experience of different companies where I lead many teams as a manager.

Might be I am a right candidate for this post because I started my career as a quality inspector at a food beverage company where I learned food testing, quality management and certification and then I moved to a another company where I learned about financial statement and business operation.

I apply for this job to improve your opratioonal efficiency and maintain costing.

I hope you can find all details of my experiences , I look forward to your prompt reply.

Yours faithfully

Amit Mishra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three required points: you remind the businessman that you met on a flight during his visit to India, identify the role of operations manager, and explain your relevant experience in food quality, finance, and team leadership. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a basis for considering your application. The explanation of suitability is the strongest part, but some points are asserted rather than developed—for example, you mention improving operational efficiency and controlling costs without explaining how your experience would help you do this. The meeting reminder could also be more precise by naming the journey or approximate time. The response covers the task well overall, with some room to extend and support its ideas more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you recall the meeting, state the job you want, describe your qualifications, and close by requesting a reply. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and the reader can follow your main purpose. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. The transition from your MBA and management experience to your earlier food-quality work could be made clearer, and the sentence beginning “Might be I am a right candidate” does not connect naturally to the evidence that follows. The closing reference to “all details” is also vague. Use clearer transitions and refer explicitly to your attached or enclosed experience details, if applicable, to make the progression more polished and cohesion less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a job enquiry, including “quality management,” “financial statement,” “business operation,” and “operational efficiency.” These terms help communicate relevant experience, and the intended meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling errors that reduce precision, such as “food beverage company,” “maintain costing,” “opratioonal,” and “artificial inteligence.” “A right candidate” is also not the natural expression in this context. Aim for standard professional collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe the industry as “food and beverage” and refer to “controlling costs.” This would make your vocabulary more precise and appropriate for a formal application.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “where I learned food testing” and a reason introduced by “because.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect fluency and accuracy. Examples include “I would like to inform to you,” “you sat just beside of my seat,” and “I have a MBA degree with finance graduate.” The long sentence joining your degree and work history with commas also needs clearer sentence boundaries. Review articles, prepositions, verb forms, and punctuation, and practise combining clauses accurately. More consistently controlled sentences, alongside your attempts at complex structures, would strengthen the letter.

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