Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

Hope so you are fine and this letter find you in a good health, i met you in the plane recently. when i was traveling to lahore. You are sit beside me and that was a great meeting with you.At that time you told me that you own a chain of resturant also you suggested me whenever i need a job in your resturant i can contact you so this is the reason to approach you.I'm very good at management and i also had a 3 year experience in management.Yesterday when i am scrolling your website i found that your resturant need a manager.I think i am suitable for this job because i known how to manage all task.I would also like to share some of my experince related to last job and what type of task i can manage.Firstly i have a good experience in management but the thing that i can tangle very well are how maintain discipline, cleanliness,how to train professional team for any resturants.Moreover,i also now organize events very well.I hope you will consider me for this job and i'm your first priorty for this job.

Thankyou,

Zahra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three required points: you remind the businessman that you met on a plane while travelling to Lahore, identify your interest in a restaurant manager position, and give relevant reasons such as three years of management experience, maintaining discipline and cleanliness, training staff, and organising events. These details make the letter relevant and show the core of a suitable application. The reasons for your suitability are more developed than the meeting details, which remain brief, and the claim that you should be his “first priority” is not supported and may sound overly forceful. To strengthen the letter further, specify the journey or approximate date more clearly and connect each skill to how it would benefit his restaurant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The information is generally relevant and follows a sensible broad order: you recall the meeting, explain why you are writing, and describe your experience and skills. However, most of the letter is presented as one long paragraph, so the progression between the job request and your supporting details is difficult to follow. Linking phrases such as “Firstly” and “Moreover” help signal points, but they are used within a crowded sequence and do not fully clarify the relationships between ideas. The opening and closing are also not clearly separated from the main message. Use distinct paragraphs for the meeting and purpose, your qualifications, and your closing request; then use a few precise transitions rather than chaining many ideas together.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of task-relevant vocabulary, including “management,” “discipline,” “cleanliness,” “train,” and “organize events,” which helps communicate your experience. However, the range is limited in places and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. For example, “tangle” does not express the skills you mean, and “your first priority” is an awkward way to describe your hope of being considered. Spelling errors such as “resturant,” “experince,” and “priorty” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise employment-related expressions and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe how you can “maintain standards” or “supervise a team.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence explaining your experience and another listing responsibilities. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the reader work to understand the message. Examples include “this letter find you,” “You are sit beside me,” and “when i am scrolling your website,” where the verb forms do not fit the intended meaning or time. The opening also joins several clauses without clear punctuation. Practise accurate past-tense forms for the meeting and experience, and use complete sentences with clear punctuation. For example: “You were sitting beside me on the flight to Lahore, and we discussed your restaurant business.”

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