Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Brown,

I hope you are doing well. I am just writing to apply for a job as a cook in any of your restaurants in GTA area.

Two weeks ago, we met in a plane when I was going for my vacation to kelowna and your were going there to meet your business partner and you told me about your work that you owns number of restaurants.

I would like a job as a cook as I have 3 years of hands on experience of working in the kitchen and I really enjoy cooking different meals. I can cook western, italian and Indian cuisines. i can work on any station in the kitchen either cold or hot. I can also handle bar sometimes if there is not any otyher person. I can work on both sides and cover people sometimes.

I am very punctual and able to work really fast. I will not really need so much time for training because I already know about all the equipment in the professional kitchen. I believe I will be the best person for this position as I understanding how to tackle with the situations when it is really very busy and I feel I can handle the kitchen better than anyone else you will choose.

I am looking forward for your reply. thank you so much for your time.

Navjot kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you identify the journey and destination, request a cook position, and explain your kitchen experience and strengths. The details about cooking several cuisines, working at different stations, and handling busy periods give the employer relevant reasons to consider you. The purpose is clear throughout. To make the ideas more fully developed, give a more precise reminder of where you sat together—for example, the flight or route—and connect your experience to the restaurant role with one concrete example of a responsibility or achievement. The claim that you would be “the best person” is quite general; a more measured statement supported by evidence would make your case more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape: an opening request, a paragraph recalling the meeting, details of your experience, and a closing. This makes the purpose easy to follow, and the sequence from experience to personal qualities is logical. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. The long sentence beginning “Two weeks ago, we met in a plane” combines several details, while the kitchen duties are presented as a series of short statements. Grouping related skills and using clearer transitions would improve progression. The closing also shifts abruptly from your suitability to “I am looking forward for your reply”; a more polished sign-off would help the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “hands on experience,” “cuisines,” “station,” and “professional kitchen,” so the reader can understand your skills and the job you want. There is some useful variety in describing your abilities, but several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “work on both sides,” “handle bar sometimes,” and “tackle with the situations.” Spelling and capitalization slips, including “otyher,” “italian,” and “i,” also reduce accuracy. Choose standard hospitality terms and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise wording would let you describe your experience confidently without relying on broad claims such as “really fast.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, such as the account of your meeting and the explanation of your kitchen experience. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. For example, “your were going” should be “you were going,” and “you owns number of restaurants” needs a corrected verb and article. The sentence beginning “I believe I will be the best person” also contains an incorrect form in “I understanding.” Break up the longest sentence and check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency. More accurate control of these patterns would make your message easier to read.

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