Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this to inform you about my interest in working with you. we have met in flight departure from india to canada ,and we both sat beside each other. During our conversation, you told me that you run restaurants and also owning many branches of that.

As per our conversation, I felt it would be a great opportunity to work with you. I am very keen in providing customers service. This kind of you not only give me income but also sense of satisfaction to helping others as a result my passion helps me to become best version of mysel.f

I believe, I would be the perfect suit of this position because I have a good experience in the relevant field. Also, I worked with team and closely monitored their needs and customers expections which would help me to manage the team in an appropriate way which ultimately leads to the growth of organization.

Your's faithfully,

ABA

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you identify the journey from India to Canada, express interest in customer service, and give relevant experience as a reason you could be suitable. The reference to having worked with a team and monitored customers’ needs supports your application. However, some details are unclear or under-developed. “We have met in flight departure” does not clearly state when you met, and you do not specify a particular role, such as a customer-service or restaurant-team position. The letter also does not clearly ask how to proceed with the opportunity. Make the meeting details precise, name the job you want, and connect your experience directly to its duties.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable progression: it recalls the conversation, explains your interest, and then presents your experience. Paragraphing helps separate these purposes, and phrases such as “During our conversation” and “As per our conversation” guide the reader. However, the progression is sometimes weakened by unclear links between ideas. For example, “This kind of you not only give me income but also sense of satisfaction” is difficult to follow, and the long final sentence combines teamwork, monitoring needs, and organisational growth without clear boundaries. Use shorter sentences to explain each reason, and make references such as “this kind” explicit. A clear closing request would also give the letter a more complete structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to applying for restaurant work, including “customers,” “relevant field,” “team,” and “growth of organization.” These choices make your purpose understandable, and “sense of satisfaction” conveys a personal motivation. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “providing customers service,” “perfect suit of this position,” and “customers expections.” “Best version of myself” is also less suitable in this formal application context. Aim for natural phrases such as “providing customer service,” “well suited to the position,” and “customers’ expectations.” More precise job-related vocabulary, such as “front-of-house role” or “team supervision,” would help you describe your suitability more convincingly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a relative clause in “which would help me to manage the team.” The main message is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors make parts difficult to understand. For example, “we have met in flight departure” has an unclear tense and sentence structure, while “you run restaurants and also owning many branches” does not maintain a consistent verb form. The sentence beginning “This kind of you” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, particularly the lowercase “we” after the salutation and the comma after “I believe.” Practise accurate verb forms and build complex sentences around one clear main clause.

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