Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hi Mr.James,

I am writing to this about our converssation we had our last flight from toronto to halifax on 20 december. We set next to each other on that flight and you told me that you have your own restaurants and contact to you about posssible job in one of your restaurants.

I am interested in assistant manager or assistant floor manager in any one of your restaurant. Right now ,I am working as a senior chef at my workplace for last two years. But now I want to explore my experience in menegering line.

I think I am enought capable for this position and I have gain lot of experience in different fields.I can easily handle customers in effective way as well I can manage floor staff and make schedule for all employees. Apart from this, I have experience working in a fast-pase environment. So this would be beneficial for your restaurant.

Please let me know ,if there is any job opportinity available in one of your restaurants.

Onece again, thank you for your time and consideration.

Best regards,

Asma Saiyad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you remind Mr James that you met on the Toronto–Halifax flight on 20 December, identify assistant manager or assistant floor manager roles, and explain your relevant experience. Your examples—working as a senior chef and handling customers, staff and schedules—make your suitability clear. The letter is relevant and its purpose is easy to understand. Some points are less fully developed, however: you could explain more specifically how your chef experience prepares you for management, or give a brief example of managing staff or customer issues. The request for information about vacancies is appropriate, but a more direct closing request for a conversation or interview would make the purpose more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: the opening recalls your meeting, the next paragraphs state the role you want and your qualifications, and the final lines ask about vacancies and thank the reader. This progression makes the message easy to follow. Paragraphing is appropriate, and phrases such as “Apart from this” and “So” help connect supporting points. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, particularly “I am writing to this about our conversation,” and the transition from your current chef role to wanting management work could be smoother. The list of abilities would also read more cohesively if each skill were linked explicitly to the responsibilities of the position. More natural linking and clearer references would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough job-related vocabulary to communicate your purpose, including “senior chef,” “assistant manager,” “customers,” “floor staff” and “schedule.” These details show an appropriate attempt to describe your experience and the role you want. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “converssation,” “posssible,” “menegering,” “enought,” “fast-pase” and “opportinity.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “explore my experience in menegering line” and “handle customers in effective way.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, even though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Check spelling carefully and learn common professional collocations, such as “gain experience in management” and “work in a fast-paced environment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the message remains understandable. For example, “I think I am … capable for this position and I have gain lot of experience in different fields” combines related ideas, while the letter also uses a conditional-style request about available jobs. Some grammatical errors remain in sentence construction, verb forms, articles and punctuation. Examples include “I am writing to this about,” “you have your own restaurants and contact to you,” “for last two years,” and “I have gain lot of experience.” Commas are also sometimes separated from the preceding word, as in “Right now ,I am.” Aim for accurate patterns such as “I have worked … for the last two years” and “I have gained a lot of experience,” then proofread sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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