Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Braden,

I hope you are having an amazing day. Myself Kunj Sheth. We recently met on a flight from Toronto to Vancouver on november 5 . As we discussed I am writing this letter to you for the employment opportunity at your restaurant.

It was a great pleasure to meet you. I am highly intrested in working at your restaurant chain as a General Manager. I have similar field experience of 12 years. Currently I employed at luxury restaurant called Avant. We are famous in Vancouver for serving Indian, South Asian dish.

Furthermore, I had been head chef for 6 years aswell. My speciality are Italian, Spanish and French cuisine. I had a passion for serving best dishes since childhood. My necessary experiences and knowlege will aide myself and your restaurant grow. It is my dream to make my restaurant achieve michelin star status.

I believe my motivation and expertise of catering food, Knowledge and Management will help your food chain achieve its goals. Please let me know if you require further information.

Best Regards,

Kunj Sheth.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you identify the flight from Toronto to Vancouver and its date, state that you want a General Manager position, and explain your relevant experience. The details about 12 years in the field, six years as a head chef, and your cuisine specialities give the request a clear basis. Your purpose is also explicit in “I am writing this letter to you for the employment opportunity.” To strengthen the response further, develop the suitability argument more specifically: explain what management responsibilities or achievements you have had, rather than relying mainly on years of experience and broad claims such as helping the chain “achieve its goals.” This would make the supporting ideas more fully developed and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a sensible sequence: you recall the meeting, make your job request, present your experience, and close by offering further information. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and transitions such as “Furthermore” make the relationship between your points clear. The letter is therefore coherent overall. However, some links feel mechanical, and the progression within the experience paragraphs could be smoother: the move from your current restaurant role to your head-chef experience and then to your ambition for a Michelin-starred restaurant is not fully explained. Use clearer connections to show how each qualification supports the General Manager role, and ensure references such as “we” and “myself” have clear, consistent meanings.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a job enquiry, including “employment opportunity,” “General Manager,” “speciality,” “expertise,” and “motivation.” These choices communicate your experience and interest, and some are relevant to the restaurant industry. There are, however, several spelling and word-choice errors, including “intrested,” “knowlege,” and “aide,” as well as awkward combinations such as “similar field experience” and “catering food.” “My speciality are” also shows an inaccurate word form. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Proofread spelling and choose more idiomatic professional phrases to make your qualifications sound clearer and more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at more developed structures, for example “I believe my motivation and expertise … will help your food chain achieve its goals.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. “Myself Kunj Sheth” is not a complete, natural introductory sentence; “Currently I employed” is missing a verb; and “My speciality are” has subject–verb disagreement. There are also tense and article problems in “I had been head chef” and “at luxury restaurant.” These errors show that control is not yet consistent, even though the message is clear. Practise complete sentence patterns, agreement, and consistent use of present and past tenses, then check each sentence for a required verb and article.

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