Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir Sakamoto,

I am formally writing you this letter to remind you about the possible job that you offered me when we sat together on the plane. I am the person who sat beside you, we take our flight at Nagoya Japan airport going to Manila Philippine airport last week November 11, 2026.

I am interested to apply as a cheff cook in one of your restaurant here in the Philippines. I just graduated on my study in cooking industry.

I am suitable for this job because I love to cook and that is my fasion. I also have so many experience about cooking when I was a child until current. I finished my actual examination at Florida USA, many cheff is amazed because of my natural talent and dedication in cooking industry.

I hope you will hire me and give me an opportunity to work in your management. Thankyou for your suggestion to use my talent in cooking.

Truly Yours,

Nikko Lacbongan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you identify the journey from Nagoya to Manila and its date, state that you want a chef position, and give reasons such as your cooking studies, experience, and enthusiasm. The purpose of contacting the businessman is clear, and the closing appropriately asks for an opportunity. This meets the task well overall. However, the suitability claims are not fully developed: “so many experience” and “natural talent” are broad, and the reference to an examination in Florida does not explain what qualification or result it represents. Add one or two specific examples of cooking skills, training, or relevant achievements to make your case more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you remind the recipient of the meeting, explain the job you want, give reasons for your suitability, and finish with a request. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow these stages, and the closing is easy to identify. Some connections between details are less smooth, however. The opening combines the reminder, route, and date in one long sentence, while the move from your studies to your experience and then to the Florida examination feels abrupt. The repeated use of “I” also makes the progression somewhat mechanical. Use clearer links between your qualifications and the job, and organise the evidence into a more connected paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main purpose, with relevant terms such as “job,” “restaurant,” “cooking,” “experience,” and “dedication.” You also attempt more specific language, including “natural talent” and “management.” However, several noticeable spelling and word-choice problems reduce precision: “cheff” and “fasion” are misspelled, “actual examination” is unclear in this context, and “work in your management” is not a natural way to describe restaurant employment. “So many experience” is also an inaccurate expression. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and use precise terms for your qualification and the role you seek; this will make your application sound more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate the main ideas using both short statements and some longer sentence forms, including “I am suitable for this job because…” and the sentence describing your journey. However, the range is limited, and errors occur across several sentences. For example, “I am formally writing you this letter” has an incorrect verb pattern, “we take our flight” uses an unsuitable tense, and “I just graduated on my study” has problems with tense and preposition. The opening also joins two independent clauses with only a comma. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the overall message remains understandable. Practise accurate past-tense narration and sentence boundaries, and build longer sentences with controlled clauses.

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