Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Sualeh,

I hope you are doing well, I am writing this to remind you that we both were travelled on 26th November from Dubai to Karachi and were sitting next to each other in plane. You told me about your ownership of different restaurants in Karachi.

Since, I told you about my passion and current job where I am working as a Manager and managing a group of people who are working in production lines. You advised me to share my updated CV with you for better opportunity in your group of businesses.

Furthermore, I would like to add here that I have done my BS in Food and Science and later I did masters in Supply Chain Management, so from the study background and job experience as well I am best fit for the job in your food business.

Looking forward for your response.

Best Regards,

Abdullah Amir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter covers all three required points: you identify the journey from Dubai to Karachi on 26 November, express interest in work in the businessman’s restaurant group, and give relevant reasons based on your education and management experience. The purpose is clear and the details are appropriate. However, the job you want is not specified precisely: “a job in your food business” could mean several roles, and your qualifications are not directly connected to a particular restaurant position. The reference to sending an updated CV also introduces a useful next step, but the request for a possible job could be made more explicit. State the role you are seeking and briefly explain how your experience would help you perform it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally sensible order: you recall the meeting, refer to the earlier conversation, then explain your suitability and close politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and the reader can follow the main purpose. Some connections are less smooth or clear, however. “Since” does not introduce the next paragraph naturally, while “Furthermore” adds a formal transition without making the relationship between the ideas much clearer. The opening sentence also joins several points in a way that makes the sequence harder to follow. Use clearer links such as “As we discussed” and “In addition,” and give each paragraph one focused purpose. This would make the progression more natural and the references easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal job enquiry, including “passion,” “managing,” “production lines,” “Supply Chain Management,” and “job experience.” These choices communicate your background and interest, and the tone is mostly suitable. Some phrases are imprecise or do not sound natural in this context, such as “ownership of different restaurants,” “better opportunity in your group of businesses,” and “best fit for the job in your food business.” More precise wording would help the reader understand both the role you want and the value you offer. For example, refer to the businessman’s restaurant group and name a specific position. Aim for natural collocations rather than translating ideas word for word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both simple and more developed sentence forms, and its meaning is generally clear. You attempt to combine background information and reasons in longer sentences, for example when describing your education and work experience. Some grammatical errors remain, though. “We both were travelled” uses an incorrect verb form; write “we both travelled.” In “I hope you are doing well, I am writing,” two independent clauses are joined with a comma, so use a full stop or a suitable conjunction. “Since, I told you” has an incorrect opening construction and punctuation, and “I have done my BS” would be more naturally expressed with a completed-study structure. Check verb forms, clause boundaries, and punctuation when revising longer sentences.

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