Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing a request regarding to apply a job

in your restaurant. First of all, I want to remid

you about me. My name is Akashdeep Singh and we met on flight Delhi to Canada. You told me about your business of restaurants in Vancover city.

I would be happy to do the job as receptionist if requried one of your restaurants. I have also experience this job from my home nation. Which would helpfull for me in but if you would select me for another occupation such as server then I would be happy to do.

Aditionally, I am ask about receptinist job because I have strong communication skills and my english is too good. Moreover, my mature very kind and calm. I love to treat unknown people.I would realy appriciale you, if you could approve my job application a soon as possible and thankyou

for your time and condederation. I look forward

hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully

Rashdep singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: reminding the businessman of your meeting, stating your job interest, and explaining your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is slightly generic given you met the person. The ideas are relevant, though the development is somewhat brief. To improve, you could provide more specific details about your previous experience to better persuade the reader of your suitability. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific request and then to your qualifications. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus. The referencing is generally clear, allowing the reader to follow your narrative without confusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors, such as 'remid' (remind), 'Vancover' (Vancouver), 'requried' (required), 'helpfull' (helpful), 'realy' (really), 'appriciale' (appreciate), and 'condederation' (consideration). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. While you attempt to use some professional vocabulary like 'occupation' and 'application', the range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and incorporating more precise professional terminology related to the hospitality industry.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There are several grammatical issues throughout the letter, including 'regarding to apply a job' (regarding applying for a job), 'my mature very kind' (my nature is very kind), and 'I look forward hearing' (I look forward to hearing). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions to improve your accuracy.

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