Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

Hope you are doing well

I am Navneet Kaur. I met you in plane journey on 25 July, 2026 .I sat next you and In plane journey you told me that you own new restaurant business . It will be open on 1st September. You told me that you also hiring new staff members in your restaurant.

I am happy to tell you that I also want to apply team member job in your restaurant as I have 2 years of experiences in working as team member in Rajdhani restaurant . I have abilities to manage fast paced restaurants

I am suitable for this job because I have experience in take order, serving skills , cashier skills and cooking food skills. I am able to manage fast peaced environment.

Please consider my application. If you need more information please contact me and I am happy to provide you more information about me

Warm regards

Navneet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, identified the desired role, and explained your suitability. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention your experience, providing a specific example of a challenge you overcame or a particular achievement at your previous restaurant would have made your application more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear Sir' is a bit generic; using the name if known or 'Dear Mr [Name]' would be more professional. Overall, you have fulfilled the task requirements effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use basic paragraphing to separate your introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and lack transition words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, the transition between mentioning your experience and your skills could be improved with linking phrases like 'Furthermore' or 'In addition to this'. Improving the flow between sentences would help the reader follow your argument more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant industry-specific terms such as 'fast-paced environment', 'team member', and 'serving skills'. However, there is some repetition of basic words like 'restaurant' and 'information'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms and precise collocations. For example, instead of saying 'I have abilities to manage', you could use 'I possess the capability to oversee'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'take order' which should be 'taking orders'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in plane journey' should be 'on a plane journey'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'you also hiring' should be 'you are also hiring'), and punctuation errors. Additionally, there is a spelling error with 'peaced' instead of 'paced'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of your writing.

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