Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sandhu,

Hope you are doing well.I am writing to express my interest in the receptionist position in your restaurant .If you remembered I met you last month during plane journey as you suggested me to apply for the job in your restaurant as you run numerous restaurants in different areas.

Last month,when I was travelling to calgary for my interview,then I met you since I sat next to your seat.I vivdly remembered you told me that you was going to calgary attend business meeting.

As you recommend me that time ,If I need any position in your restaument I can apply for job position one of your restaurant.I am interested in receptionist position.I would interested in toronto location, as its not only convenient for me to commute there but my college is also situated in same city,Therefore,I do not have to face any kind of trouble to communte.I can continue my work along with my study.

I have all the skills which made me eligible for this position such as great demand on communication skills,patience, team work .which extensively require for this position

Thank you for your time and consideradation.i am look forward your response

your sincere

prabhjit

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role (receptionist), and provided reasons for your suitability. The tone is generally appropriate for a business-related letter, although the opening and closing need more formal conventions. To improve, ensure that the connection between your skills and the specific job requirements is more clearly articulated. For example, instead of saying you have 'great demand on communication skills,' you could explain how your previous experience or personality traits make you an asset to a restaurant environment. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Therefore' and 'As you recommend,' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The transition between the meeting details and the job application could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'that time,' 'there') is precise so the reader can easily follow the narrative of your previous encounter and your current intentions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'eligible,' 'convenient,' and 'commute.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'great demand on communication skills' (should be 'strong communication skills') and 'consideradation' (spelling error). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'I would interested in.' To improve, focus on learning common collocations used in professional correspondence and proofread carefully to avoid basic spelling mistakes. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise professional terminology would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a good start. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses ('If you remembered,' 'you was going to'), articles, and punctuation. For instance, 'I am look forward your response' is grammatically incorrect and should be 'I look forward to your response.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall fluency of the letter. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage to improve your accuracy.

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