Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing regarding for getting a job into your well- Known Business ; i will be share all valuable information into forthcoming paragraphs.

To begin with , i knew to you sir from 2 year because during that time we both met into a Shopping mall . Owing to your suggestion that time i took MBA study for becoming expert into deferent king of business skills .

Moreover, i have completed my master as well as i have 6 months experience of working as a Manager on a superstore .Therefore, i want to work as Manager on your business . Because i want to sharp my business managment skills .

Apart from this there are many reasons why i want this place . The prime one is that i want to be a successful manager of an organization .

I look forward to hearing from you .

Yours Faithfully,

Ram sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the meeting context, the job interest, and the suitability. However, the content is somewhat underdeveloped. For instance, the claim that you met the businessman at a shopping mall two years ago and that he suggested you take an MBA is slightly illogical in the context of a plane journey. The tone is also inconsistent; while it is a formal letter, the phrasing 'I knew to you sir' and the lack of a specific name (using 'Dear Sir/Madam' instead of a name) makes it feel less professional. To improve, ensure your narrative is consistent and provide more specific details about your skills.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To begin with, i knew to you sir from 2 year'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the logical flow is hindered by grammatical errors that make it difficult to follow the narrative. The use of 'Moreover' and 'Apart from this' is a good attempt at linking, but the underlying sentence structure often makes the progression feel disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the text flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include 'getting a job into your well-Known Business' (should be 'at' or 'with'), 'deferent king of business' (should be 'different kinds of'), and 'want to sharp my business' (should be 'sharpen'). While the message is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the repetitive use of basic vocabulary prevent a higher score. You should focus on learning common collocations related to business and employment to sound more professional and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('i knew to you'), prepositions ('met into a Shopping mall'), and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'Owing to your suggestion that time i took MBA study for becoming expert into deferent king of business skills'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct preposition usage.

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