Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Asim Robinson,

Hope you are doing well. Through this letter, I want to draw your attention to my concern that I need a job in one of your restaurants.

It has been about when we met on a plane before two months and you told me that you own a restaurant chain. You also said that you often need some of the employees, such as chefs, kitchen helpers, or customer services et cetra. So, now I am in the same country where you live. As this is the initial phase of my journey, I need a Customer service job, if there is any position.

I have two years of customer service experience in India. Also, I think I can do this job effortlessly since I have a keen interest in dealing with different kinds of people, and I heartily like to solve customers' problems. If you find this position suitable, I would like to join immediately. I will be very thankful to you.

your Sincerely

Manjeet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, specified your interest in a customer service role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is slightly inconsistent; phrases like 'draw your attention to my concern that I need a job' are unnatural and overly formal in a way that does not fit the context of a friendly professional follow-up. While the ideas are relevant, they could be developed with more professional polish to better persuade the reader. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the expression of intent could be more natural.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Also' and 'If', but the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. For example, the transition 'So, now I am in the same country' feels abrupt. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, but the overall progression could be smoother if you used a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly. The structure is clear, but the cohesion lacks the flexibility required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary like 'customer service experience' and 'restaurant chain'. However, there are some awkward word choices, such as 'before two months' (should be 'two months ago') and 'heartily like to' (which is not a standard collocation). The use of 'et cetra' is informal and should be avoided in professional correspondence. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding redundant or slightly misused phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'It has been about when we met' (incorrect tense/structure), 'need some of the employees' (should be 'need some employees'), and 'your Sincerely' (incorrect capitalization and possessive form). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and standard letter-closing conventions would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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