Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing in connection with the conversation we had regarding a job position at one of your restaurants. we met on August 4, 2026 during a flight form Surrey to Alberta.

I am interested in a management level role which likely to be an operation coordinator. I currently work as a warehouse supervisor and my previous job was a sales associate but I handled almost every department their. I have experience in ecommerce, shipping and receiving, handling cash, product knowledge. I am punctual, quick learner, organization, problem solving, leadership. Moreover, I have completed my studies in computer science which make me a strong candidate for this job position. I have experience in managing google sheet and excel documents. I can manage troubleshoot problem as well whenever the restaurant server is down. Also, I have two years of customer service experience.

Waiting for your response.

Yours faithfully,

Charan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the desired role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat list-like and lacks the professional depth expected in a formal letter. For example, simply listing 'punctual, quick learner, organization' is less effective than integrating these traits into full, descriptive sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on expanding your points to demonstrate how your skills would specifically benefit the restaurant owner's business, rather than just stating them as a list of attributes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific request and then to your qualifications. Paragraphing is present, though the body paragraph is quite dense and would benefit from being split to separate your experience from your technical skills. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Also', but the flow is occasionally interrupted by short, choppy sentences. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences are connected more fluidly to create a more professional and cohesive tone throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'management level role' and 'strong candidate'. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'handled almost every department their' (should be 'there') and 'managing google sheet'. Additionally, your list of skills ('organization, problem solving, leadership') lacks the necessary grammatical form to fit naturally into the sentence structure. To improve, focus on using more precise professional terminology and ensure that your word choices are grammatically consistent with the surrounding text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'which likely to be' (missing 'is'), 'make me' (should be 'makes'), and 'I can manage troubleshoot problem' (should be 'I can troubleshoot problems'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the lack of capitalization for 'google sheet' and 'excel'. To reach a higher band, you need to proofread for subject-verb agreement and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without missing auxiliary verbs or prepositions.

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