Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing great . I am writing to show my interest to work in one of your restaurants in toronto city.

Do you remember ? We recently met on the Emirates flight from London to Toronto airport and sat next to each other. To be honest, it was memorable conversation as I got to know more about your business journey.

I am interested to work as senior cook in one of your restaurants in downtown Toronto . I have been working as chef from last 10 years in 5 star hotel and I am curious to work in different workplace like yours.

The reason I am interested in this job because I am capable of working in fast- paced environment under pressure . Moreover, I would be more than happier to be a part of big restaurant chain that offers career development and expertise.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Sonia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly identified the context of the meeting (the flight from London to Toronto), specified the desired role (senior cook), and provided a logical reason for your suitability (ten years of experience in a 5-star hotel). The tone is generally appropriate for a professional follow-up letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is slightly generic; using the businessman's name would have been more professional. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your narrative. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'To be honest' to link your thoughts. However, the transition between the introduction and the second paragraph is a bit abrupt. To improve, ensure that your paragraphing flows more naturally by using a wider variety of linking words or phrases to connect the context of your meeting to your current request for employment.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fast-paced environment', 'career development', and 'expertise'. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'curious to work' (which should be 'keen to work' or 'interested in working') and 'from last 10 years' (which should be 'for the last 10 years'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band. Expanding your use of more precise professional terminology would enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'I am writing to show my interest to work' (should be 'in working'), 'memorable conversation' (missing an article 'a'), and 'more than happier' (should be 'more than happy'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation errors, such as the space before the question mark in 'Do you remember ?'. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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