Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the job offer you gave me in a plane last week.

Last week i accompanied you on the flight from Winnipeg to Toronto. During the conversation, you told me that you own a chain of restaurants in all over Canada. As you were impressed with my communication skills, you offer me a waiter job in your restaurant in Toronto. Although i consider this job very valuable but I think this job is not suitable to my studies.

I am interested in the management jobs as i have Masters degree in management. I can bring more value to your business as a manager rather than a waiter.

I consider myself as deserving candidate because I have experience of 4 years in restaurant business as a manager. Moreover, my studies compliment this job.

I hope to get a reply from you soon. I will look to get a joining letter soon.

Yours faithfully

Davinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting, stated your interest in a management role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the tone is slightly inconsistent; while you address the businessman, the phrasing 'I think this job is not suitable to my studies' is a bit blunt. Additionally, the transition from the waiter offer to your counter-proposal could be more professional. To improve, ensure your tone remains consistently formal and persuasive throughout, as this is a business-related correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Although,' 'Moreover,' and 'However,' to link your thoughts. However, the paragraphing is a bit fragmented, and some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother, particularly when shifting from your past experience to your current career goals.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'communication skills,' 'management,' and 'compliment.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'in all over Canada' (should be 'all over Canada' or 'throughout Canada') and 'joining letter' (which is not standard business English). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of professional business terminology would significantly enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as the frequent failure to capitalize the pronoun 'I,' missing articles (e.g., 'in a plane' should be 'on a plane'), and tense inconsistencies (e.g., 'you offer me' should be 'you offered me'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses to improve your accuracy.

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