Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Hritik,

I hope you are doing well. To begin with, I am Palak kochar writing this letter to you about a job position in one of your restaurants. Two weeks ago, I met you in an air canada flight which was heading to Toronto and I sat right next to your seat. We had a conversation regarding your Indian restaurants in Toronto. Meanwhile, you suggested me to join one of your restaurant so, I am writing this letter to you that about any vacancies in your restaurant regarding customer service representative role as I have worked with Mcd and Walmart at front desk for 1 year which would be suitable for your restaurants as well. Moreover, I have worked in a fast-paced environment and I am flexible to every kind of shift. Please let me know if there is any position regarding customer service role as my experience would be perfectly suitable for that role. I am attaching my email and contact number down below.

Regards,

Palak

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly identified the context of the meeting, specified the desired role, and provided relevant reasons for your suitability. The tone is appropriate for a professional letter, and the purpose is clear from the outset. To reach a higher band, ensure that you expand slightly more on your professional attributes; for example, instead of just mentioning your previous employers, you could briefly describe a specific skill you gained that would benefit his restaurant chain. Overall, the task is fully covered.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the request and finally to your qualifications. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'To begin with' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is currently non-existent; the entire body is one block of text. To improve, you should break the letter into distinct paragraphs: one for the introduction/reminder, one for the job request, and one for your qualifications and closing. This would significantly improve the readability and flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'fast-paced environment' and 'vacancies' correctly. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'suggested me to join' (should be 'suggested that I join') and 'in an air canada flight' (should be 'on an Air Canada flight'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the variety and precision required for higher bands. Try to incorporate more specific professional terminology related to the hospitality industry to elevate your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For instance, 'I am Palak kochar writing this letter' is slightly awkward, and 'regarding your Indian restaurants... regarding customer service' shows repetitive use of the same preposition. There are also minor punctuation and capitalization errors, such as 'air canada' and 'Mcd'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of sentence construction and prepositional usage.

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