Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir ,

I hope you remembered me , we met on our flight last week from Calgary to Toranto and we are sitting next to each other . we discussed about the job in one of your resturent.

I am feeling exited to tell you that i also have a 6 months of experience in dishwasher job from the joeys Restaurant in Calgary andi am also willing to move to Toronto for this job and also i was impressed by your nature so i am very exited to be a part of your carrier journey .

i think that i can handle this job with very well manner and behaviour because i was worked in a 5 star restaurant and i have a great reviews from the previous customers .

if you willing to hand over me this job i was very happy to work at your restaurant.

Your faithfully

Gurmanpreet singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You successfully reminded the recipient of the meeting context, identified the job role, and provided reasons for your suitability. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention your experience as a dishwasher, you could have elaborated more on your specific skills or contributions to the restaurant to make your application more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, though it occasionally lapses into informal phrasing. Overall, the response covers the requirements well enough to be considered complete.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes repetitive. You rely heavily on 'and' to connect ideas, such as in the second paragraph where you use it multiple times in a single sentence. The progression of ideas is logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your thoughts more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You use simple terms like 'job' and 'exited' (misspelled) repeatedly. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'carrier journey' instead of 'career path' and 'handle this job with very well manner' which is non-standard. While your meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there are noticeable spelling errors that detract from the professional tone required for a job application letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'we are sitting' instead of 'we were sitting'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'I was worked'), and punctuation mistakes. Additionally, there are several spelling errors, such as 'Toranto' and 'resturent'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity and professionalism of your writing. Focusing on basic tense consistency and proofreading for spelling would significantly improve your score.

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